|Reviews for fight to keep you breathing|
| Phibonacci chapter 1 . 2/2/2011
Absolutely beautiful use of words, I love it.
| for shame chapter 1 . 3/11/2010
i like this piece.
sometimes, it's hard to tell who's alive,
and who's simply breathing.
the only thing i would say is that
the repetition of body in the first few lines was awkward.
one too many, and one too few.
it wasn't a full-blown attempt at repetition,
but it wasn't just a mere mention of "body", either.
i feel like there's a deeper meaning to body that you're trying to convey,
but i just can't see it.