Reviews for Here Are My Late Night Thoughts
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 6/20/2010
"I dug under your skin and found your core/And began to fall in love with the person I found"... I didn't like the repetition of found here. I think you should rephrase it so it's not so repetitive.

"I have never felt this way in my entire life"... In Verse 2, this is the only line in present tense. I think you should put it into past tense.

In verse 3 you start with you looking at him and then switch to him looking at you. I like idea there of how those two things are connected, but I felt like the change between to the two was a bit abrupt.

I liked the song, it was definitely relateable. I think you conveyed your emotions well and gave the reader a good balance between how things were and how they are now for you.

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