Reviews for Downfall |
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![]() ![]() ![]() OMG. this is SOOOO interestin! |
![]() ![]() ![]() WOW. JUST...WOW. AND ITS ONLY ONE CHAPTER. ...WOW. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like it! A girl with a bit of fire is my kinda read! -porkypine97 XD |
![]() ![]() First off: Amazing idea. Great characters so far and good use of the dream. Now the 'good' things: The writing was a bit too... telling? You know how teachers say that we have to SHOW not TELL? Yeah you are telling. this would have hit the awesome button if you had just described the scene and left it for the readers to pick up. all in all, love it and cant wait for more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hi I loved this chapter but I was wondering if this was the only chapter or is there more? I would love to continue reading this story |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved this! :) I think I just fell in love with Greek mythology all over again I'll be going to read your other stories now :P |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved it! I was pretty sad at how Adrian and Gwen died and was kinda scared of the thought of Jack dead, but I survived. Lol. I still think "of fields and ciggerates" is your better, more mature work while this is has 'debut writer' stamped all over it. There were some grammatical errors and one chapter where you wrote Harper instead of Harlow but all of this can be fixed oncebyou take a good look over it. So yeah, Jack and Helena must be one of the sappiest couples I've ever read about but I still adore them to bits. And the Greek mythology/Christianity religion mix totally threw me off cuz they basically contradict each other but again, I totally loved it. It's nice to let go and just enjoy the story instead of nit picking through everything like a bitch (which I sometimes can't help but do -I need to find consistency in everything). Hope I'll read more of your future stories. You won't see the last of me just yet :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This felt so Percy Jackson-ish but pretty different at the same time. I'm wondering why the daughter of Hades would get more powers than the daughter of Zeus... |
![]() ![]() ![]() That so buzzingly intense. Intense. Intense. There's a lot of chemistry between Helena and Jack I keep getting these chills. |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG, are you kidding? I love this! I mean, it's not as "polished" as "Of fields and ciggerates" and the genre is totally different but I'm already hooked. Finally, something supernatural in the romance section :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I read this in a couple of days and I really enjoyed it :) The storyline had a good pace and it was never boring; I liked Helena's character - it was nice to see a strong female character that can also show her vulnerable side, if that makes sense! Also, I loved the inclusion of Greek mythology. I feel that, sometimes in stories on this site people can write a very rose-tinted view of the Greek gods but your portrayalwas more true to the actual myths, what with them having children with random human women (sorry, random isn't the right word but I can't think of what I mean LOL) and making decisions that seem unfair to the reader. That's just how I see it anyway. So yes, I really enjoyed reading this story a lot! :) xxx |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think Im gonna cry :'( Best story ever! and I have red a total of *counts* 52 and yours was, by far, the best |
![]() ![]() absolutly loved this story. it took me about an hour and a half to read it and i finally finished at 1 am. lol but this story was by far the best written and the best told story ive read on this site. thank you for posting it for readers like me to read. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This story soo rocks! I love it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my gods! This was such a delight! Did I ever mention I love Percy Jackson? Well. I do. And this is like Percy Jackson but in a whole different way. Love the Olympians, the vamps, the angels, and the hot guys. Please make a sequel! I would be forever indebted to you. Good luck on your future ventures. Do keep writing. |