Reviews for Downfall
Chocorange888 chapter 15 . 4/5/2010
Things are much clearer now that I've read Jack's version, but I think that perhaps you should have changed your style slightly now that it's a different narrative, because if I didn't know that he was talking about Helena etc. I would have thought that it was the same person talking. But it was quite good an essential chapter to have in order to make things flow. Thanks.
Floppy125 chapter 14 . 4/4/2010
OMG! Please update ASAP! I think it'd be great if you wrote the next chapter im Jack's POV, but you shouldn't stop where this chapter did. Maybe write what happens next...?

AAnyways... sorry for the late review... My computer has broken down and I'm using my sister's.

Madz95 chapter 14 . 4/2/2010
hey, i dunno about you writing it from jack's pov. i think it read great from helena's but whatever you find necessary. haha. well write faster. i really really like this story :) hehe.
Chocorange888 chapter 14 . 4/2/2010
Eh, this chapter was interesting, a bit short, but I'm really looking forward to Jack's POV.
Floppy125 chapter 13 . 3/30/2010
I'm team Jack ;) I loved this chapter!

Please update ASAP!
Chocorange888 chapter 13 . 3/30/2010
Wow, you update at super speed! Thanks for the chapter, and I really hope that she resolves her problems with Ash. I'm really looking forward to Helena meeting Hades, I hope it's going to be soon :)
Floppy125 chapter 12 . 3/29/2010
Argh! I hat Ash! I want her to be with Jack! I absolutely lov this story :)

please update ASAP
CoUrAgE mAkEr chapter 1 . 3/29/2010
wow this is getting more and more intense i think that it would have been cool if you made her confused on witch boy she likes and have like a whole chapter on like how she would be able to decide and dont let jack give himself away so easily make him make helena gulity so that way she knows who she wants the one that makes her i dont know really guilty or something like that but its your story and i just love it i think about it all the time and feel like i should have an angel protecting me. so when im walking home i pretend that jack is next to me he sounds like a nice gentleman ...and HOT but i really like ash to so im kinda confused on which i like better lol update as soon as posible thank you
Chocorange888 chapter 11 . 3/29/2010
I'm very glad to have found this story today, the characters are really likeable and there is a lot of potential for this story to have more depth. I have to admit, I do find that Helena may be 'obssessing' a bit too much over her relationship with Jack, but I suppose that's what you are supposed to do when you are a teenager. Please keep up the good work and thank you very much.
CoUrAgE mAkEr chapter 11 . 3/28/2010
update please
prfctlyimprfct chapter 11 . 3/27/2010
great plot and lively characters.
Madz95 chapter 10 . 3/26/2010
ur story is better than good. its amazing haha. keep writing. faster. haha looking fwd to that new chapter in the morning. feel like i wanna sleep now so i can wake up and find it :) hehe.
Madz95 chapter 6 . 3/18/2010
hahah jack and charlie sound hot. hahahahahh. nice story. ehh, but you changed ash to charlie... it was weird? you should make an author's note or change it because im sure i cant be the only one who noticed.
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