Reviews for Ancient Silence
Rockin-Ferrett chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
"I shout above the steps, weeping from my throne. I beg you, hear my moans" this was my absolute favorite part. I don't know if you want to protray this, but to me it seemed like unwanted power or the mixture of power with inner weakness. I loved the metaphorical description you used. Your beginning was strong by stating it as a fact. That made me question what it meant so I continued. That is (of course) a good aspect of the piece because if the first lines don't look good, a reader won't bother with the rest. Therefore, you have success! ;) oh, and some of the rhyming was nice, but at times I think a little choppy or disorganized. Not sure if you wanted it like that though. x3
LittleBlueOcean chapter 1 . 4/14/2010
I liked this. Especially this part "turn my life into dance

circle my thoughts and sing in trance

enlighten me with your sultry glance

you love to watch my morbid waltz

exposing all my awful faults"

Great job! You really have a talent for writing!
Misplaced Admiration chapter 1 . 3/21/2010
That was fantastic! There's so much in this and the way each stanza address a different theme or idea and- oh, I don't even know how to think about it. It was compelling, I've read it a few times to think about it and it's really smooth and refreshinng to read and still original! I loved it! Good job! Will be keeping an eye on you now! XD