Reviews for The Baby
Guest chapter 1 . 10/14/2014
I love short stories with a twist. This story reminds me of Chopin's Desiree's Baby.
Anis chapter 1 . 8/23/2014
Lol. I just wrote a (full of spelling and grammaticals) review on the firstly published version on how i had guessed the twist on the middle of the story and how I couldn't understand this guy's decision to stay with someone who can't trust him. But then again, we know nothing about this Lillian, do we? Anyway I still think the same.
rainreverie chapter 1 . 5/13/2014
whoa, huge plot twist. Definitely wasn't expecting that, but I liked it a lot!
DragonOwl chapter 1 . 3/2/2014
What!? WHAT HAPPENED!? I really did not see that coming! At first I wondered why he wasn't 100% happy, but now I see.
Parker. Lily Parker chapter 1 . 12/22/2013
I've read this one shot around 20 times since I first found it... and I still cry like a bitch every time. Words can't express how my heart breaks for this dude. In fact I've just realized thinking about this guy would be perfect if I was ever in a situation where I needed to fake-cry because I automatically tear up when I remember the ending.
I remember when I first read it I was so pissed at him. I could not understand how he (and his parents) could not be happy at the thought of having a baby with a woman he apparently loved, or at least why he didn't talk to her. Honestly I felt super bad for Lillian. Her characterization at the beginning made me feel like she was to nice and lovely of a person to be with someone like the guy. Then I got to the end and all I wanted to do was REPEATEDLY STAB THAT BITCH IN THE FACE WITH A DULL RUSTED SPOON. Violent I know, but it's all your fault for being such a great writer.
So thanks for sharing and sorry for the long review (I totally would write more but I need to go cry in the bathroom about the unfairness of life some more :P) that basically just said you're awesome and you're writing is awesome, even if it does the depress the crap out of people :).
terabithias chapter 1 . 8/16/2013
That was so simple, yet so brilliant- the twist didn't occur to me at at all! somehow lovely and sad all at once; this read is going into my favorites for sure.
AlysonSerenaStone chapter 1 . 8/11/2013
This was really good! I was afraid that I wasn't going to like it, but I do. It's really good for being under 1000 words.
Me D chapter 1 . 8/3/2013
i was not expecting that.
great job!
kayla chapter 1 . 8/3/2013
this story gives me chills. I didn't pick up at the hints at all, and only realized the truth at the end. I read it again right after, and the hints were more noticeable. Fantastic story. The devotion is beautiful.
my princess ending chapter 1 . 7/24/2013
I am beyond speechless and I have no idea how to feel about this short story. It sounds like something I would do (marry the girl even though she cheated) that's why it affected me so much. I have no idea what kind of feedback I should give because I am so speechless therefore, my review shall end here.

With love,
Mt chapter 1 . 7/18/2013
Wow.. seriously amazing one shot. in 900 words, you had me curious (of his behaviour), happy (for Lillian), angry (at his parents, and then suddenly it all turned around! Nice job!
neelamneedsnirvana chapter 1 . 6/29/2013
omg omg omg you're amazing and brilliant and you've just taken all my feelings and ... there's not even a word for it. How are you so good and creative?
Naomi chapter 1 . 6/24/2013
That was so good. Oh my god haha -speechless-
Ney13 chapter 1 . 6/19/2013
Well, shoot. That really wasn't anything like I expected.
Guest chapter 1 . 6/17/2013
I meant "Holy Shit" as a compliment by the way.
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