|Reviews for Number One|
| Peachy-09 chapter 1 . 9/13/2012
The basketball bit sets the scene but my favourite bits definitely have to be once we meet Elly/Kam. Simply adorbs! Beautifully written.
| Laurieleigh92 chapter 1 . 8/8/2012
Once you get into the Kam/Elly moments of this story, it's an extremely addictive read. Perfectly written.
| rosieroo chapter 1 . 7/11/2012
AMYYYYYY! I don't know what you were saying about it not being good. I loved it! I haven't played basketball since I was a teeny weeny kid but the way you explained it all made it so easy to understand. I loved the mix of sport in with the romance. And Kam was such a cutie. I loved it!
| Mr. Ree chapter 1 . 7/11/2012
So I'm not exactly sure why I hadn't read this before now, but I'm glad I did! I loved how you described the basketball game and Elly's thoughts as she played and I absolutely adored the last line. This was really fun to read :)
| HelennnLouise chapter 1 . 7/11/2012
Hey! I am here to share some exciting news with you! This story was added to the One Shot category over on A Drop of Romeo! :)
Here's the Review:
"Desperate for a sugar fix after losing a basketball game, Elly is down at the vending machines when she runs into someone she's least expecting; the boy she's had a crush on since Kindergarten. Kam Kendall plays for her rival time so she believes there's an unwritten rule that they can't date but this has prevented her from crushing on him nor did it stop her friends from sending a friend request off her account on Facebook nor does it stop him from accepting. So what, exactly, does that mean?
I'm not going to lie when I state that I'm British and therefore, not knowledgeable when it comes to the game of 'Basketball' but Castiel89 writes the moments perfectly; making me aware of every action, game plan as well as the emotions that the team players are feeling. This, however, obviously isn't the main subset of the story. Oh no, not in a long run.
Do you want to know what makes this story one of the best I've ever read? It's the fact that it's based on real events (sadly, this does not include the ending!) and this personal outlook from the wonderful Castiel89 provides a story filled with raw emotion that anyone who has ever 'suffered' from an unrequited crush will be able to relate to. Each awkward moment that Elly feels when she's faced with Kam is realistic; the fear to add him on facebook, stumbling over sentences when he's around and hiding away when he steps into her place of work; and is extensively relayed across through beautiful narration.
As biased as I am; that's right, Castiel89 is fellow judge, the lovely Amy!; this one shot is 'Number One' in my books."
Keep writing, (or I'll find a way to beat you with a spoon)
| freakyzoe chapter 1 . 1/12/2012
Nice one shot :)
I think it should have been more developed, and longer... it's like every time, you just say something, don't explain, then move on.
Ex: her relationship with Robb: If you didn't exploit it, why talk about it? if you just wanted to say she wasn't a virgin, just put it somewhere in the text :/
Ex: the ONE paragraph about her ex, WHY don't even her best friends know about it? WHY isn't this explained further, if it affected her so much? It honestly felt like you added it afterwards, to give her an excuse not to act on her crush.
Or at least when you want to say something, you should maybe put it more "subtly" (ex: if it really was your intent about the virgin thing earlier, say something like "I don't know why I acted this way around Kam, it's not like I was still a virgin", instead of making a whole background up with Robb) to keep it simple.
I actually thought the love interest was Robb at first, then the paragraph about her ex confused me (too much details and sort of intense feelings made me think there wasn't any closure and he would come back?), then this Kam guy pops by, they have their first conversation EVER, they make out, she's focused again, she defeats the opposing team, and is right in her world?
Anyway, I know you didn't ask for such a detailed review, and I'm probably overdoing it, but it's only because I really liked your story and I think it could be even better :D
| InkWitch chapter 1 . 6/13/2011
meh, i didn't like this as much as i liked your other stories, but that's probably because i'm not a fan of basketball. still, it was well written and an ok read.
| JustWords chapter 1 . 5/28/2011
Again, amazing, and totally hilarious story. You're on a roll B-) 21! Its probably been months, but congrats and happy birthday :)
| Lady of romance world88 chapter 1 . 11/27/2010
Hi. Its ok to be lost or win in the games. I do remembered my mum told me that no matter what happens next and just do your best. :) So its important to know that Elly tries her best and she don't need to blame on herself after she lost the game. There always be the win next time. :) I understand how you felt when you are around your crush. Someday you will use your courage to talk him and you might discover that he has same feeling for you. All you do is try, girl because you never knows. *hugs* I hope thats you find a decent guy out there and keep looking. :) I admired Robbie and Brooklyn's strength courage to click Kam's fb profile how much Elly like him. Aww how cute Kam and Elly kissed. :) It remind me of my first ex - boyfriend whom was my first crush since i was eleven and i was dated him when i was sixteen. He was first guy i slept with when i was eighteen. And yeah he broked my heart since i was nineteen. But i got over him and he always will be in my heart. Yeah i do loved him alot. People changed as they grew up. Its true and i never regret about it. *smiled* Everyone have their own experiences and love relationships. :) So this story is very good. :D I really like it. But it remind me when i was with my ex - bf *sigh* Anyway just keep writing. :D
| emmslay chapter 1 . 8/1/2010
this is seriously a really cute story
please PLEASE please update soon ;D
| Juliet chapter 1 . 8/1/2010
Hi! It's Juliet again. Your one-shot has been added to ADoR. :) Congratulations, and here's your raving review:
This one-shot was actually based on real events (except for the ending, sadly). Anyone who has had a crush can relate to Ely, the main character. It's cute and humorous-perfect for when you're in one-shot mode.
| xEchoxInfernox chapter 1 . 7/12/2010
great one-shotD. in response 2 ur authors note, i hope evrything works out the way u want it 2:).
| mesweetescape chapter 1 . 7/10/2010
I read this story a while back and didnt get the chance to review, so ive come back to give you one. :)
I think you've got a real cute story.
sorry it didnt turn out the way you wanted it though :/
| sappyromancelvr chapter 1 . 7/10/2010
Super cute. :)
| Katie Valentine chapter 1 . 7/7/2010
Ah so that's why the story felt so real.. It is somewhat based on actual events! COOL! I do hope you get "Kam" one fine day! o
I like this. *giggles*