"hard to find , hard to keep"... find, hard

"Must work hard and be true to thyself".. I didn't like thyself. I'm not sure if you're using it correctly and I don't get why you would use it since the rest of the poem isn't in Old English.

I think you used a lot of words over and over like trust and true and soul and love. I think it would be less predictable and more varied if you found some synonyms. I also think this piece could use some punctuation because I found it hard to follow the phrases as times.

The peice is cute though. A very sweet point of view on love that most can relate to.

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Pleasant and incredibly sweet. Glad to see you're posting again.

~Yusuf

Aw, this one's sweet!