Reviews for He Implores
eblakes93 chapter 1 . 4/8/2010
Hi! Sorry I haven;t been keeping up with the reviewing that well! This is a really interesting poem, I particularly like the last two lines of the first stanza "he's forgotten the surface./ when will he breach the heavenly air?" On a personal level, this reminds me that whenever I am feeling down, I can surround myself with the thigns that give me "heavly air" like my friends, comfy bed, and books. I think the narrator is speaking of a much deeper pain, however. Your imagery is particularly appealing in the last two lines of the second stanza: "why he's on his knees, and screaming, raking th earth with his nails, and imploring:" I get this excellent vision in my mind of a boy in the middle of an open field, a thunderstorm in the distant, screaming at the top of his lungs, something right out of a movie script. Overall, a good poem.