Reviews for Death Dancer
Charlee Rayne chapter 26 . 9/20/2010
Oh. My. Friggen. God...

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I can't believe you!

They didn't end up together!

HOW HORRIBLE!

AND THE OTHERS?

WHAT AHPPENED TO THEM!

OH MY GOSH!

THIS IS THE BEST FRIGGEN STORY I'VE READ IN A LONG TIME!

I LOVED IT... except for above... although you ended it good.

Just kind of sad...

and abrupt...

seems like you almost got tired of it.

you could have added another book about trying to see each other because they couldn't because it was segregated. Made the other vamp girl and human her new best friends...

but you're the author. And i still loved the story!
Kiragirl93 chapter 26 . 9/19/2010
I stumbled upon this yesterday and I was so entranced by the story line that I only stopped reading to sleep, eat, and use the bathroom. It made me cry, It made me laugh, It made me sit on the edge of my seat, and at times it make me unsure if i should keep reading. I loved it, and if I was a publicist, I would make this into a book to be sold to the masses.
Charlee Rayne chapter 24 . 9/12/2010
How sad! I love them, but that's really sad! They had a whole lot of people they cared about!
Midnight Adrenaline chapter 24 . 9/11/2010
I'm really sorry I haven't been leaving reviews. Mostly I've been tired, plus it's my first week in the 11th grade and because I'm in the stupid French system our hours of class are BRUTAL (about 30 hours of lessons per week, but i spend closer to 40 hours at school every week).

Anyway...

I am LOVING your story. In the past year, I've stopped reading stories here, on FP, but every Saturday I eagerly await the following chapter of YOUR story, and I stay up late to read it (different time zones and all) and it's worth it. Sometimes though I feel like more should be happening in each chapter, but unless you're planning to publish it, it doesn't matter. (If you are, editing exists for a reason.)

And to answer a question you asked in the author's note of chap 23, I think the epilogue should be posted at the same time as the last chapter. (And what chapter is the last chapter? I don't want it to end anytime soon.)

-Kayleigh
Charlee Rayne chapter 23 . 9/5/2010
i hope they're not going to be on the wrong side! Wonder where they got the helicopter...
random reviewer chapter 16 . 8/31/2010
that was a viscious cliff hanger. you r evil
Charlee Rayne chapter 22 . 8/31/2010
AW! YOU SAID MY NAME!

Thank you!

And I FRIGGEN LOVED this chapter! FINALLY, they friggen released all that pent up sexual tension!
erin254 chapter 21 . 8/21/2010
well like all your chapters even though i don't review i just get to caught up in the story so sorry...i can't wait to see how they react when they wake up and find each other in there arms!
Charlee Rayne chapter 21 . 8/21/2010
he's nasty to her and she falls for the guy... what a weird world their in!
Charlee Rayne chapter 20 . 8/16/2010
oh frig! What happened! And please don't tell me that Kat and Greyson died! AND DOMINIC! I LOVE HIM!
Goldpen379 chapter 20 . 8/15/2010
Wow... I can't even describe it! Just wow! It's great!
Goldpen379 chapter 19 . 8/15/2010
Wow! This is an amazing story you have! I have no negative comments for this story. You have me hooked to this! I also have a story going on too. I haven't been getting any reviews so I don't know if I should kep it going or try a new one. Could you help me out?
Charlee Rayne chapter 19 . 8/8/2010
wonder what the rumble was... How curious...

And poor Dominic! he's probably besides himself with grief for the others who died. Then the rest of the people he cared about are being cruel to him... i feel so bad for the little love...
Charlee Rayne chapter 18 . 8/1/2010
wow... poor girl.

i do the same thing. But people forget that she also is alowed to wollow...
TriforceofEternity chapter 8 . 8/1/2010
No No: I for one am glad you put your personal tibit there as to alert readers as to what is going on.

How did your graduation go?

Good chapter.

I like the character development with Jericho and the Piper. Sine she got a dreaded reversal card looks like SHE may pay the piper and I don't know about you but I think she would try to *escape* or "run away" from the cavern more often just to be in familer settings when she is stressed. :o

I only have one nit-pickey thing I'd like to see edited:

I would like it if you could have Piper go back to her home to see if anything personal is salvagable as you never know what might be left...

That'd be the first thing any person would do after a catastrophic disaster to see if they can get basic supplies or just to see what's left of.

You seem to have not hinted about her home in the city and like the other author said below where is the Everglade Forest as there is only swamp land there however there are scattered pockets of woods here and there but not a full fledge forest to the point where you can't see anything BUT trees.

It's almost like the Willamette Valley here in Oregon with small pockets of trees...except we at least have mountains to go to with lots of National Forest Department Roads that go WAY in the back but aren't maintained in the winter.

(NFD)
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