O my goodness. I love this story, It is so tragic. I can't believe Sakura was decapitated. Great stroy, btw.

aw.

it's good so far keep up the good hard work of writting this and post another chap soon please.

Very good. Usually, I hate to read stories that have decapitation, killing, ect. But, I loved this.

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Great start! I love the contrast you have in this. The beginning is so beautiful and peaceful, and I was hardly expecting such a tragedy to happen. When it did, I was as shocked as Yuki. Very effective way to draw the readers in!

I also love the poetic imagery this has. I know the whole thing with sakura blossoms is very symbolic in Japan, and the end with the blood and the flowers was a very poignant image.

The only thing I would have like to see more of in this was Yuki's reaction at the end. Based on the beginning, she seems young, so I would expect even more of a terrorized reaction. You had some of her reaction with the screaming and running, but what about being afraid of the person who did this? Or the scene where she found her sister's head-there was sadness, but not so much discussed.

Anyway, very solid start. I hope you decide to continue this and keep up the good work :)

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A really interesting start - I liked the contrast between the innocent bonding of the sisters and their love for the tree, compared with what she then finds in the house. Horrific, and it makes me eager to find out what happens next. I think you managed to convey the emotions fairly well, however I only found out that Okasan and Sakura meant mother and father by reading another review; I was confused when reading as to who he was, as there had been no mention of him earlier. It kind of lessened the impact of his death.

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Wow! I really enjoyed the balance here. It started out to peaceful, and then it just turned so gory. I am curious to see if the Cherry Blossom is important (and why). Who killed them, and why as well.

An intriguing start!

Wow. I wonder how such a light hearted story turned so horrific toward the end o.O I certainly wasn't expecting that. I feel bad for her though...losing all her family, though it was pretty out of the blue, and we never actually got to know who killed them at the end or why so it would've been better to have elaborated on that. But maybe it's best left unknown for an eerie effect (x

One thing I may point out is the name confusion. At one point you say her sister's name is Sakura, then you say "...But that didn't stop me, I was determined to find out what was wrong with Yumi." I thought the main characters name was YUKI not even Yumi so I got pretty confused there. And then you changed back to calling her sister Sakura, so you might want to go back and look at that because it did get a bit confusing. Overall pretty nice story. Just like before the story is about nature, seems to be something you really enjoy writing about (:

Good work on this, but just look over it one more time for some mistakes !

~Idareutoguess

The intro is missing something. I like thenarrative at the beginning, but i feel like we're missing descprtion, a mental picture of the characters and the setting. And I shouldn't know that their names are Yumi and Sakura ( i only know because i'm a full blood otaku, lol) you should say it early on too. My critique is not all negative though, I like the positive energy of the story and the image of two young sisters bonding and having though I know Okasan and Otosan is mother and father, you have to kind of assume the audience doesn't, and if they don't they'll be lost and scratching their heads as to what these terms mean. The imagery of blood and flowers is poetic and pretty too, have to give you props for I feel like i missed something crucial between the sisters playing and the family being murdered. It's your baby, but the audience needs that all important lead before the finish! Can't wait to see more though, I know you got something big planned here. :)

Nice prologue. I loved it. Simplicity is the main part here, as the protagonist is small.

There are some parts where the story could have been more powerful.

This sentence does not convey the seriousness or the shock :I soon snapped from this trance when I heard a sharp scream that sounded like Yumi. - The sentence could be more stronger.

The last sentence:I dropped her head, and ran out screaming, not bothering to look for her body, which was covered all over with cherry blossoms.

'all over' is pretty redundant.

Apart from that, it is very interesting. :)

That was crazy right there. The narrator seeing her whole family died was nuts and the descriptions of her sister's death.. wow man wow...

The narrator seems like a smart seven year old by the way she is telling the story.. I love the cherry blossoms in general, they are one of my most favorite flowers. You did a good job on this and I can't wait for more.

~Rayne~