|Reviews for A Lunatic's Tale|
| Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 14 . 6/2/2012
ohhhh! Such a sweet story! I love the ending!
There were just a few sentences that were a bit messed up. I just did this kind of thing in Grzammar class, so I think I know what it is. Chapter 1: We really do have a gorgeous house- white, rimmed with treated dark oak, two-stories, with four, also white with the same wood trim, steps leading up to it; and, leading up to them, a stone pathway, randomly placed stones, but of muted colors of red, blue, grey, and purple. Firstly, it's really really long. Secondly, there are a few words that aren't really in the right place. You may want to change it to: We really do have a gorgeous house-two stories, white and rimmed with treated dark oak. There are four steps that are also white with the same wood trim leading up to it; and, leading up to them, a stone pathway made of randomly placed stones of muted colors of red, blue, grey, and purple. A lot of your descriptions run on like that. Of course, it doesn't have to look exactly like that, but it probably should be changed.
Keep up the great work! The story is amazing!
| slightly crazy a little lost chapter 14 . 4/16/2010
Very cute! There were a couple of places that were awkwardly worded, but very nice in general!~
| J.L. Lofthouse chapter 14 . 4/6/2010
great story, im glad ahe was cured, but only one question, why was she like that in the first place? but i loved it :)
| J.L. Lofthouse chapter 1 . 4/6/2010
good start, it seems like an intresting story.