|Reviews for The Archeologist|
| rika195 chapter 2 . 4/12/2010
A very excellent second chapter. You are taking this in a good direction, and are not leaving your readers in the dark. It's good that you explain what you mean so that as Dare learns something, so do we. It had a good flow all the way through, and a good ending. Keeps us wanting more.
You could try using ; less, and use complex sentences instead. Also, you wrote: "She hadn't realized that there were so many focuses or different types of mages, and blurted out suddenly. "Then, what kind of Magus are you?""
But you should more accurately use a comma after "suddenly" than a period.
Keep it up and update soon! I can't wait.
| rika195 chapter 1 . 4/12/2010
Your writing style is very engaging, and you capture scenery, expression, and conversation so easily! This is a very interesting and warm story already, and I am excited to see where you take it. I am also interested in learning more about this world and culture you have created.