Reviews for Eternal Rest
Beat Backbone chapter 1 . 4/12/2010
I liked the opening line, it really made me want to read more.

I liked this part- her life had fled,

while death came waltzing in. I had a good idea of what was happening in my head. I enjoyed reading this.
Isca chapter 1 . 4/11/2010

Despite the fact that this is a short poem, it's wonderfully poignant and intriguing. The opening line, "she saw a shift in life," immediately draws the reader in. I like your use of the word "deceleration" too; it adds a bit of vibrancy to the imagery. I would capitalize "Death", though, because you're using personification, and you capitalize "He" at the end, so it's only fitting. This was good. :)