*nosebleed*-/-

I love Cam and Will! You should write more of these! :D

I have to say this was very enjoyable to read! Usually it is never this well described! Well either way Im going to try this on my boyfriend later! Jeez that was 'amusing'

that is so hot! you got my heart thumping and blood went down south. Now, if the story is longer I'd know why Will was having nightmares and who those two were. But all in all, for a one shot, it's smutty and nicely done. just the kind to make my day

Hot damn!

I didn't really take you seriously about the nose bleed thing at first but holy crow was I wrong.

That has to be one of the sexiest and hottest things I have ever read. Most published authors aren't even that good with smut.

Amazing!

I absolutely LOVE it.

That was pure eroticism. Very nicely written. :D

cat ears? good tho

I really like this, but there are a few things you could fix.

Will gave a soft cry of pleasure at the almost painful pleasure,

This sounds a little redundant, maybe try 'touch' inplace of the second pleasure.

where he know knew

Just a little mistake, probably something you left behind while editing.

" I love you as well, Will." Said a worn out Cam.

Should be:

"I love you, too, Will," said a worn out Cam.

It reads more naturally.

Also, I know this was a heat-of-the-moment sex type thing, but we really don't want Will in the hospital. Just and FYI spit lubrication often ends in tares in the bottom's er, how can I put this eloquently, arsehole.

And, while I'm on the subject of arseholes. When you were covering Cam sticking his toungue in, what did you call it? Will's star? All I could think about was 'how unsanitary!', but that might just be me.

Even with these little issues, it was still a fantastic story, and very, very sexy with enough emotional background to keep it reading like romance and not like erotic literature.

...Wow, this is a really long review, and I hope I don't sound rude or obnoxious, when I find a writer like you who has, I don't want to say potential, because you already write well. When I find someone who is a good writer I feel that giving advice like this can only help not hurt their ability.

Keep Writing,

Triizore