|Reviews for Arranged|
| megs92 chapter 29 . 10/10/2013
I enjoyed reading your story. You are right. It was similar to the movie Avatar, but I thought maybe with a little Alice in Wonderland thrown into the mix. My only problem was your plot around the whole "arranged marriage" seemed to be a little shakey. I don't understand how they could snatch humans and marry them that same night when they lived on the surface. If humans knew they existed, wouldn't a war start from them snatching women? I don't know. Maybe you did explain it but I might not have grasped the concept clearly. Other than that and a few typos, I loved it. :)
| PaintedPicture chapter 29 . 9/6/2013
amazing, amazing story! So different and awesome, I enjoyed it, besides the need for a bit of grammar and word corrections (you wrote except instead of accept in chapter four and small other words such as that) it was amazingly written! Keep up the good work and I am looking forward to reading your other stories!
| FlamesFromPurpleFire chapter 1 . 5/7/2013
this was a truly amazingly written masterpiece. i fell in love with all the characters and they were all wonderfully developed and dynamic! I look forward to future works from you!
| DreamsOnlyLastForTheNight chapter 29 . 5/6/2013
Wow, what an amazing world you created in this story. The way you described it was so perfect that I could just picture it in my head. By revealing the Vidarian's history you made this world seem very realistic and I can tell that you put a lot of thought into it!
I really enjoyed all of your characters, even Shea. They all seemed very complex and three-dimensional and created a great dynamic in your story. Alison was an awesome main character. She was strong, quick-witted, determined, kind, and she didn't let anyone mess with her! The love interest between her and Qwinn, although it happened in only about two weeks, seemed very plausible. You did a good job of actually showing the reader how and why they're falling in love with each other so it didn't feel rushed at all.
You did have a few small errors here or there but nothing that really took away from the story. Also, the first few chapters when she was still with her uncle seemed a tad bit rushed at times.
All in all, I really enjoyed it! :)
| Stephanie M. Moore chapter 29 . 4/28/2013
I've been less than impressed in recent years by the general quality of work around FictionPress. But this, this story was a fantastic find.
You did a spectacular job developing a realistic progression for Qwinn and Allison. It felt a little repetitive around Chapter 19/20, but I think overall each chapter effectively contributed to creating a believable relationship! I've seen various versions of this plot, but I think you did a good job here. Your world is unique, and I think you include enough details and background to provide color to your story's setting.
You have a very nice writing style and overall, a clean manuscript. You have some scattered spelling mistakes and homophones like feat/feet that need to corrected, but a quick edit could catch most of those errors.
I like Allison as a character. She was dynamic, smart, yet vulnerable. Qwinn was a little dry for me (at times), mostly because he knew from the beginning he loved Allison, but he was an adorable male lead who was easy to root for. :)
I really enjoyed this story, and it is has earned a place on my good list. You definitely deserve more reviews than this. I hope the sequel is equally fantastic.
| Flowering Lotus chapter 29 . 4/20/2013
WHAT'S THE SEQUEL CALLED!? I've had to get on and off reading this and it's amazing you came up with this all by yourself! Congratulation's!
| Melanie Brutalie chapter 2 . 4/8/2013
Pretty good. I like it so far though you need to watch out for youir spelling.
| Luna Magic17 chapter 29 . 3/26/2013
I loved this story. I can't wait for the next one. :)
| IMnotAlice chapter 29 . 3/23/2013
This is really really amazing :D 33
| B chapter 29 . 3/19/2013
Oh good. I was fearing that this really was the end! Haha. Very well done! You get a cookie!
| B chapter 27 . 3/19/2013
You UPDATED! I love you soo much right now! :)
| CorycianAngel1944 chapter 3 . 3/18/2013
I like the story, so Alison is captured by strange creatures?
| TheShadow666 chapter 29 . 3/18/2013
I love how this ended! So sweet! And really? A sequal? Yes! I can't wait for that! You story is simply amazing!
| violetwriter chapter 29 . 3/18/2013
What a perfect ending for a perfect story :) well done, very well written
| TheShadow666 chapter 27 . 3/11/2013
Dude so kewl - but there's only 2 more chapters left? Aw man! But I can't wait for the next chapter though!