|Reviews for Mother, Why?|
| Serendipitist Swan chapter 1 . 10/16/2010
This reminds me of me and my younger sister. Or me and my younger brother. It really sucks to be the oldest sometimes.
| deefective chapter 1 . 9/13/2010
I really like the genuine emotion in this. The longing for a parents approval is a universal truth that everyone can relate to and the way you portrayed it here is very open and honest. Very real, which in its own way makes it poetic. On the other than, as for the technical side of this piece, I think you could have formatted this better. I don't understand why you cut up your sentences, it disrupts the flow a lot. And it seems rather unnecessary because I don't see how it helps the piece. I also think you should have separated this into stanzas as well, just to give it more effect. But other than that, nicely done.
| Zaarah chapter 1 . 8/17/2010
I like your poem. It's very honest, however there's a few places where the flow seems inconsistent. I can relate to your poem too! I think it's simple and well-written. Good job!