|Reviews for Ripe Little Rabbit: Deformed Doll|
| simpleplan13 chapter 2 . 3/19/2011
I didn't really like the repetition of together in the first stanza. I did like the first stanza though. I thought your image of being sewn back together was really powerful and beautiful.
I liked the second stanza too because it's realistic that you would still be deformed. And the ending was a bit sad which I also liked. Less cliche than typical yay I've been put back together pieces.
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| Isca chapter 2 . 5/4/2010
"Just maybe I'd stop needing stitches." I like that the word 'keep' used earlier suggests that the speaker LIKES getting hurt enough to need stitches; how interesting!
| Isca chapter 1 . 5/4/2010
"You would make an Egyptian Queen proud." This reminds me of a woman I met when I was 13. Her name was "Angel." Her husband had thrown acid on her face, so she wore a lot of make-up (and looked quite Egyptian) to cover up her scars and burn marks.
| Phoebe Melinda Halliwell chapter 1 . 4/20/2010
| Phoebe Melinda Halliwell chapter 2 . 4/20/2010