Reviews for OneShots
honey haiku chapter 21 . 3/17/2014
Who was it that said that if we met a clone of ourselves, we would not recognize it? Or that every human harbors a deep dislike for themselves? Anyway, you are exceedingly like me in writing style. I wish I could say I enjoy reading it for that reason, but I do not. It is almost beautiful, soclose, but not quite. The assumptions are too strong, and the adjectives are too plentiful. Thank you for the lesson in presentation.
honey haiku chapter 3 . 3/17/2014
The writing is beautiful, but the repetition doesn't work here. In using your catalog you've exhausted your options for expansion. Then again, this is a one-shot. Low commitment. It's alright. I admire your writing immensely, perhaps less the writing style.
Ritti chapter 26 . 8/24/2011
This review is really for Short, Fat, Stubby, Drunk, and DEAD. But since I had already reviewed, it wouldn't let me do it again. Thus.

TA-DA! I FINALLY finished purging my freaking flashdrive. And, bonus, I found the finished copy of Short, Fat, Stubby, and Drunk. Along with a few other things. Will post them as soon as possible.

Alas, in the original, you did win the count, because I only had thirty-seven. Reading it over now, though, has revealed a few more 'drunks' I can fit in there. Haha. ;) Don't worry. It'll still be under a page, as was the one rule, if I'm not mistaken.

Whatever. Just expect to have your butt whipped sometime in the near future.


Ritti chapter 25 . 8/1/2011
I'm all smiles. Now I just gotta get mine in working condition. XD
NearlyPrescient chapter 2 . 12/26/2010
the duality between the tempest and the dead ship really gave this an interesting edge for such a short piece. great work
Again. laziness chapter 21 . 12/25/2010

... 'nuff said.
I was too lazy to log in chapter 20 . 12/25/2010
... but you know it's me anyway, right?

Girl, I feel like your getting all up in my grill with this one. Isn't this unreal place exactly what Ryuu and Katriona are striving for? It's real to them, just not to us...

Muhammad, I feel stupid. But that right there, my friend, is truly what I felt deep in my heart. *tear, sniffle* Truly.

Oh, it's Christmas. Boo you, I'm allowed to leave reviews like this. At least it makes you smile, eh?

And now I'm Canadian...
Ritti chapter 18 . 8/7/2010
So, I'm guessing you wrote 16 while we were in New York? Or would that just be, like, a bad assumption? And since I remember reading 17 when you wrote it, I shalt skip commenting on that.

I like this oneshot. Hehe. It drives me mad because I want to know why she stepped away, but I guess that's the point, eh? Anyway, I think you should write more stuff like this. I like da fluff you write.


P.S. Boys definitely do have cooties. Lol.
Howle chapter 6 . 5/10/2010
Life fascinates you, really? I'm sure you're probably the only one I know to whom this strange phenomenon happens.
Howle chapter 5 . 5/10/2010
This sounds like somebody's account in the beginning of To Catch a Predator. You better be careful around those enigmatic men, and their magnetic eyes.

I'm just making the realization that I comment solely on your content rather than your style of writing. I wonder if there's a reason for that? I wonder if it is my discretion or your lack of a style whatsoever? I'll let you figure it out.
Howle chapter 4 . 5/10/2010
Midway through I was expecting you to go into "my life is spiraling downward..." and the rest of that emo song floating around the internet. But really, this was intense. Much more intense than that song. I can really see you are a VERY depressed person. I mean, this is exactly what it feels like, right? "The emptiness of the abyss fills my soul," because emptiness is something that can fill you now that you wear black make up and listen to My Chemical Romance.
Howle chapter 3 . 5/10/2010
I was really liking the first two paragraphs. I didn't know why you chose to end it the way you did, 'cause this would have been one awesome porno!

Maybe you could still pull it of. Except change the title to the "The water people's wet dreams," or something. It's classy, it's attention-getting, it's straightforward. After all, the hireling sheperd has absolutely nothing to do with this story.
Howle chapter 2 . 5/10/2010
Well, this has one plus. It's very short. I'm sure if it was about 4 sentences longer, it would put many accidental readers asleep. I know I nodded of toward "the seas rippled and swayed powerfully."