|Reviews for After Midnight|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 6/19/2010
"fingers clasped tight"... shouldn't it be tightly?
I didn't really like the fourth stanza. Something about it just seemed awkward. Almost like it didn't fit with the rest of the description. I think it was because I took the poem to be describing teens and the idea of her thinking of herself as growing into an old woman as easily as she would buy a pair of jeans just didn't seem to fit.
Anyway, I did like the rest of the piece. I thought the descriptions (as always) were really great. What I really liked though was the subject. It was a lot more upbeat and happy than your pieces typically are. It was sweet (a little less in the last stanza, but still).
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| Isca chapter 1 . 4/23/2010
"Though the silence of the snowstorm is louder." I love the gentle tone of this line; it's soft, yet impactful because it is so. I like the idea that the silence of nature is louder than laughter, louder than joy, as though it is more holy.
"The wind wails; an old-woman sound, something I have not grown into yet." Excellent writing! I think the last part would be better as "something I have not yet grown into" though. Regardless, the 'wailing' image is very striking; the speaker is still young and doesn't feel entirely comfortable in the presence of 'old' Mother Nature.
| Black Sparrow chapter 1 . 4/23/2010
I love your work so much - it is all so beautifully written. This is a beautiful story of a forbidden love, of sneaking out and prowling the night when you know you're not supposed to.
So adorable and so lovely. Absolutely brilliant, per usual :) Great job.
| YasuRan chapter 1 . 4/22/2010
A lovely take on forbidden love with Nature as the backdrop. I must say, I get so excited when I see the Author Alert in my inbox telling me you've written something new :3. All your work is so inspiring!
| letyoursoultakeflight chapter 1 . 4/22/2010
Love the little world I found here in your poem ]
and for a while
we are the only creatures
left stalking the wild world.
| OspreyEagle chapter 1 . 4/21/2010