|Reviews for My Immortal Commentary|
| Guest chapter 43 . 7/12/2012
You're quite something. Stars for being politically incorrect, and I'm looking into the rest of your stuff!
| Guest chapter 6 . 6/30/2012
In this fic you said that you weren't aware that blood comes in other colours than red. I just wanted to inform you that it does. For example, animals who belong to the molluscan class have colourless blood that turns blue when exposed to oxygen. The blood of some insects is the same. Lizards in the genum Prasinohaema have green blood. It just bothers me when people assume all blood is red.
| jango up jango down chapter 43 . 4/21/2012
this is hilarious, good job. Most my immortal commentaries are cringeworthily full of 'intelligent corrections' of spelling and bad, BAD humour - but this, this had me giggling enough to question my own masculinity.
| Grace chapter 2 . 3/8/2012
Dude, 4 pairs of earrings isn't that much. I know somebody with 9 piercings in each ear.
| V.M.Stone chapter 34 . 2/8/2012
OH MY GOD A NEGATIVE REVIEW AT LAST! *tacklehugs Jeldaly* But sweet Jesus, did you pull some nasty cards on me, and I do feel the need to defend my honor *dons armor and helmet*:
1) The Mr. and Mr. Smith joke was a reference to the movie "Mr. and Mrs. Smith," in which two spies' marriage suddenly starts falling apart, though they can't figure out exactly why. I was merely joking that if Mr. Smith was actually gay, it would be quite obvious why his marriage to a woman didn't work out. If anything, it was anti-homophobic - but probably a bit too much of an in-joke to be very funny, I'll give you that.
2) I wish I could be clever and use the "my sarcasm was just too subtle for you" line again here...but I really can't. I guess I did mentally connect the Middle East (as an area, not a race) to terrorism and warfare because, hey, that's what's on the news every night. Revolutions, tons of soldiers dead, a million stories about car bombings in the paper - it seemed a safe assumption. BUT! That doesn't mean I think all Middle Easterners are terrorists. That just seems to be the general area where the most explosions are happening, most of which are not the citizens' fault. Race has nothing to do with the joke, and I'd have written the same sort of line if these things were happening in West Kansas. It's called defensive humor and I have it in spades, even if it does make people want to slam the Racist Button as hard as they can.
3) As for Hogwarts...I have no defense. I am just a poor ignorant 'Merican fool who didn't know that. My apologies. *commits nerd seppuku*
Reply rant over. Hope you keep reading and don't still think I'm a Nazi hobo. -VmS-
| Jeldaly chapter 34 . 2/8/2012
I love you to bits and pieces and you're incredibly hilarious, but in this chapter, you were homophobic, racist, and just plain wrong. You said something along the lines of "Mr. and Mr.? No wonder they didn't work out." Also, there was "non-existent but probably still bomb-riddled Middle Eastern country". What, exactly, are you trying to say? That if it sounds Middle Eastern, it must have bombs and war and terrorism? And finally, HOGWARTS IS IN SCOTLAND!
Mini rant over. I know this is old, but I was rereading and had to point these out.
| Hopeful reviewer chapter 32 . 12/14/2011
Translation-Noil, meet Ebony Way from narcissium, state of denial. Have you read "ravens"s fanfiction? She actually got over fifty GOOD reviews. It basically is just as bad as my immortal minus the "trbl" spelling.
Someone with to much time on there hands at ten at night.
| Formerly-known-as-GAH chapter 33 . 11/7/2011
Ah, I see here you have learned the error of your ways. Forgive me.
I am a hardcore fan with discerning taste.
| GAH chapter 32 . 11/7/2011
TARDIS! Not Tartus! TARDIS!
It's an acronym for Time And Relative Dimensions In Space! LOOK IT UP!
| EmUntitled chapter 18 . 9/2/2011
This is so funny. I've read the first few chapters of My Immortal before and found it hysterical, but it's so much better with the commentary.
Also I think "ps da oder eson dumbeldor swor is koz he trin 2 be gofik so der!" might be:
"P.S. The other reason Dumbledore swore is because he's trying to be gothis, so there!"
| That1Girl chapter 1 . 8/25/2011
you live in minnesota? haha me too XD only my friends and I call it minneSNOWda. lol anyway this is a funny story!
| hawkfire111 chapter 1 . 7/27/2011
Salutations again! I made an account, and decided to review the story again. So... yeah. *adds story to the before non-existant favorites list of this account, backs away slowly*
| hawkfire111 chapter 22 . 7/26/2011
I wasn't going to review again, but I just had to when I read this line:
"So Cujo has magic rabies now. I see. *nervously looks over shoulder, dials phone* Mr. King? The dog died in the book, right? …Right?"
Stephen King's my favorite author, and I just love that line
| hawkfire111 chapter 4 . 7/26/2011
you know, i didn't even know what fictionpress was until recently? God, i feel so dumb. i don't even have an account here. Anyway, off topic.
You are perfect. not only did you post the monstrocity that is My Immortal(which takes guts, as several idiots out there would probably flame you, not getting it thru their thick skulls that you didn't actually write it), but your commentary is just perfect. i only wish i had an account here and could favorite this. then make another account and favorite again. then again. and again. sadly, i'm too lazy to do that, so you'll have to make do with this single review. Sorry.
| Amz chapter 43 . 7/22/2011
I've managed to read every chapter of this, but I think it's only because of your commentary :p haha. It really is brilliant, and had me laughing so much at every chapter :D
I would have been COMPLETELY lost without the commentary :p
It's quite worrying that she thought she shouldn't be flamed for it :p haha
Anyway, thanks for the laughs :D