Reviews for relapse
Erlkoenigin chapter 1 . 4/26/2010
Das Haiku gefällt mir noch besser als das andere!

LG

Franziska
Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 4/25/2010
I like it! A strong metaphor for the corruption of religion/mankind. Nicely done.

Much love,

Juliet
nickyO chapter 1 . 4/25/2010
First off, great poem. Now on to a lengthy discussion.

I read your introduction and am trying to puzzle the poem out:

templethe soul

bellthe inspiration/belief illuminating within the soul

winds the indifference and emptiness of a 'lost' or 'dead' faith, going through the motions of belief without belief?

This is a very interesting subject for me. Because I think that sometimes when the soul enters a "long dark teatime" of sorts, when the emotion behind the belief quiets and stills that there is the opportunity to discover that belief is more than emotion, it is actions. For instance, I can say the words "I love" and feel enraptured but if my actions aren't "loving" then the words are like the wind you described, empty. I think it is the intent that becomes incredibly important in these instances.

Am I close to what you were intending with the poem?