Reviews for wishing only wounds the heart
blackrosestears chapter 1 . 8/20/2010
Raw emotions...I really love this piece if for that reason alone. Great wording. Powerful piece.
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 5/16/2010
"with it's unspoken words"...its

"And that your hand fit mine perfectly when it was intertwined with mine"... I didn't like the repetition of mine here. it just seemed awkward

"till the end of days"... this phrase sounded so awkward. the end of days? Not time? Either way it seemed cliched, which the rest of the descriptions weren't so it seemed out of place.

The capitalization drove me a bit crazy here. Sometimes you do the first line. Sometimes you do it with the sentence. Sometimes you calitalize the word after &. It's just inconsistent.

I did like the structure though. i really long lines worked for the stream of consciousness and I liked the piece a lot. I think you described your feelings for this person really well. In a way that everyone can relate. It was bittersweet and full of emotions.

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