Reviews for Break It Down
Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 4/27/2010
I think this is a strong character study for the times we live in. Keep up the good work.

Much love,

Juliet.
mAcHiNe chapter 1 . 4/27/2010
love this as alwas. you did a good job staying with the one feeling and not deviating more than necessary. all and all it has good rythm tone etc. I really like how specific it is. non abstract ya know? with physical things that ppl know and do all the time. the only thing that I didn't like so much was the last line love god you seems removed from the rest of the poem.
MiseryLucy chapter 1 . 4/27/2010
i just love this - the sarcasm's so nice :D at least i find it sarcasm. and the part: "Breathing the pain/As we choke down every gram" is so wonderful, absolutely fantastic. VERY nice job!