Reviews for Stranger Danger
RhythmOfMySoul chapter 1 . 5/7/2010
This has an interesting plot line, but I feel your first chapter needs to be a lot stronger. It definitely needs to be longer, you can use those extra lines to have a lot more character development.

Also, you need to start a new paragraph when a different person speaks so as to help the reader understand who is talking.

Overall I felt really disappointed because I know more about the story from reading the plot synopsis than from the first chapter. I don't think this chapter captivates the attention of the reader