|Reviews for Our Moral Ground|
| Dusk Howler chapter 1 . 5/7/2010
this was amazing..you have a gift in poetry!
| Isca chapter 1 . 5/2/2010
"You make love like I shake hands." I love this similie; it's absolutely profound. :)
"And both we know." Should that be: "And we both know"?
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 4/30/2010
I like this. There's definitely a maturity here that isn't often found on this site, and it is a maturity that comes from age and experience, rather than pretending to know what it is to be an adult. I can appreciate that. At first I thought there were too many commas, particularly in the "Although" stanza, but they belong there, and I'm not one to talk about too many commas, anyway. Haha. I love the lines "In my soul, I am a farmer./In my soul, I am a poor immigrant." Beautiful. Gorgeous poem, and if I may recommend a poet to you, I think you would like Kimiko Hahn. Her subject matter can be a bit explicit at times, but her writing is really gorgeous and mature, and careful. Anyway, good poem, and keep writing! :)
| Punslinger chapter 1 . 4/28/2010
"...you make love like I shake hands/in friendly recompense.."
That's a good simile. And I like the metaphor that moral ground can't be made fertile without mutual commitment.
Thanks for giving us something to think about.