|Reviews for The Lotus Eaters pt II|
| improv chapter 1 . 5/4/2010
I have no idea where you're going with this and I love that. I also really like how you've explained characters - particularly Eric and Lena.
The only thing I would suggest, is to change one of your starting lines slightly: "This dark humor was the topic of conversation on top of Eric's roof." The double use of 'top' sounds a bit clumsy. Other than that, this is pretty darn good.