Cant wait for an update! Great job, keep up the intense plot ;)

Hey so a friend sent me this story, I'm glad she did because I REALLY enjoyed it so far! You've built your characters really well, and have the makings of an awesome awesome plot here! Very uniquely done too- can't wait to read more! )

I can't help but love this story with its rounded, quirky characters and mystery. Please update soon!

this is really brilliant but you havent updated in a while ahhhh

oh Sol, she never gets it easy does she? While Colin gets to go to MIT and blend in while living in a gorgeous house, Sol gets to run around questioning nefarious specials and dealing with all those reprecussions. I assume there will be some conflict between them about it sometime.

haha I laughed with all the superhero names, they just sound so official and slightly silly.

and just to reiterate what I said before, Sol is badass when it comes to protecting her own. Smart about what she would do instead of squealing, she's this strong female character which I really like

aha the whole chapter I was wondering when he was going to think about Sol, and finally at the end he did. I really want to know exactly what kind of work he is doing, is it ala ender's game where the games he thought he was playing was actually something more nefarious? guess i will have to see

His main motivation is his mom, I guess that makes him an easy mark to get to join this organization to be able to provide well for her like she has done for him. Hopefully that caring won't make it easy to manipulate him. Sol and him are falling on opposite sides of the field arent they? Sol would cherish her freedom too much to be apart of what Colin is doing

Sol always seems to find herself on the wrong side of the law. I love how she loves the lemon tree and is willing to get caught trying to get it, it means that much to her. The way she sustains on vegan things make me liken her to some type of fae, flitting away in the night.

There was a whole lot of names thrown out and since we are experiencing Sol's worldview I know that they won't be explained right away until she knows which is interesting but I will say that I was confused with everything. Hope that the next chapter reveals more of the intricate details of their world

oh my, of course the government would be involved and there has to be some underworld counterpart group out there to balance it. I hope that it doesn't become too cliche in that sense, but I doubt it and even if it did your ability to write would distract me from it.

I like that Colin wasn't able to breathe in Sol's space of completeness, it'd be too easy. That space is her, it kinda reminds me of her own personal Eden a space where its purer and makes her too pure to eat processed cheese and meat (thought they are quite delicious!) I also like Colin's pleasure in being able to show up his classmates for once, it only makes sense.

ahh this chapter made me so nervous, not knowing what was going to be the crescendo of the whole thing but it was a great way to end it out, they simply blinked.

Everything just reinforces the differences between them, Colin belongs among and even when she tries Sol is just not going to blend. and she really shouldn't she's been able to grow up on her own and these girls were stuck going through the highschool motions and she's this bad ass chick. She should be able to just do what she wants, she's had no one to tell her what to do for so long she just doesn't care and I like how Colin just went with it.

everyone else just seems pedestrian and it really serves as a great contrast for how different Sol and Colin are, its pretty great.

I don't know what to pick out that I didn't like. I feel like these reviews are more just me gushing about how much I like your writing, can't get enough of it

I wanted so badly for them to have a normal night at prom, their lives are already filled with so much otherworldliness that itd be nice to see them just relax but that wouldnt fit into the overall theme of your story. The relationship between Colin and his mom is always touching, especially about his mom's past, "highschool loved her its been the years since that's wearied her" such a nice touch. You can just picture her with tired eyes and slumping shoulders but still being able to smile and hope for her little boy. Colin is grounded in life, its his Gift that allows him to be , forces him to be. Whereas Sol is always one step to somewhere and doesn't need to be focused, her Gift makes her a shadow. I really like the contrast between the two.

Well whatever happens to the two on prom night at least they were able to make his mom smile before they left. It probably will have something to do with that ricky character.

I wish that Sol had stayed with Gordon, but I know that can't happen it'd be too predictable! She wouldn't be off flitting to museums and stealing from the rich. It also just stays in line with her character not being trusting and trying to keep quiet and away from trouble.

I want her to have a simple life though, a normal one where people would look after her and she'd go to school. But I'm glad that Gordon cares for her and at least she has Colin to rely on as well.

Its funny how she cares about the dress and a hint of the teenage girl comes out and coos at the lovely green embroidary and name brand gear. Can't wait to read about the prom

Sol and Collin's relationship also just seems to click, which I like. Sol must be on her own a lot, out of necessity, from her escape from home and she didn't seem to be noticed very much when she was at home so being able to talk to someone that shares her uniqueness must be great for her. And for Colin it must be a find of a lifetime, I remember in the second chapter where he thought one would throw the world off balance there must be more like him out there. I like that Sol, though younger than Colin, has this worldly nature to her that she really should have she's lived and seen more than him. His naiveness about how to survive in the city matches his good character and the result of his mother working to raise him well.

Sol's life seems fabulous, though lonely. Being able to whisk away to the next adventure is great but dangerous. I'm glad she's able to get away whenever she can with her growing ability to try and be in two places at once. And her revulsion to being touched is a nice touch as well, with what she had to do.

really looking forward to how the rest of their friendship continues to develop. And even though they are dealing with more mature situations they still seem to act like kids instead of miniture adults

oh, so it wasn't Sol that had to be careful but her little sister Arwen that broke my heart. I can just imagine her trying to talk to Sol to letting her stay and not even being able to say why, and by not telling us what Don was exactly doing makes it even more painful.

Sol experimenting with her powers was nice to see because its what anyone that has some type of power would do, try to expand it into something more. And that moment when she's inbetween seems glorious with being able to breath and quietly compose herself into the next situation that she is going.

And awesome I'm glad that she kills Don, I sort of really dig stories that have some type of bloodshed and the swift justice that she doled out was great. and she even took the time to try and tell Arwen what to do before she blinks into the next adventure.

Its really wonderful to see this type of creativity and pretty downright awesome storytelling on this site. can't wait to read the remaining chapters

I'm having a hard time deciding which character I love more. I totally dig Sol's quietness about her and how she adapts to her situation but I also really like Collin's personality in that he likes to put one over the bullies even though he knows he'll get beat up later for it. And I like that he's become a smart ass.

Like I said earlier you have all these little details that pretty much sum up his entire life. the fact that his mom wants him to do well in school that she'd rather eat boxed mac and cheese rather than have him work and I'm glad that someone will be able to benefit from his talents. You can just picture the weary mother doing the same routine many times. Also just the routine you establish between Colin and his cousin and all the years that the same type of teasing has taken place it all just works

I love the way the two of them meet its kinda perfect.

I want so much to just quickly read the rest of the chapters but I want to take the time to at least review them since you took the time to beautifully write them.

Again everything just seemed to flow, I smiled when Sol talked about Gordon from the garden and how much he taught her about vegetables and cooking. I felt sad when she couldn't blink in elementary school, pretty much like caging up a bird that longs to fly and I panicked when Don was asking her all those questions. At first I thought it was going to turn into one of those abused stories and was grateful that it didn't.

The only thing that I can point out is that Sol is in 5th grade? She's only 10? I understand that she's the quiet good kid that tries to help out and has had to mature but to be able to prepare fresh spinach noodles? That's kinda above any 10 year old's culinary level but I let it pass because I really love her character. I can't even say that her mother is an unbelievable character because I know that its easy to be so busy that you are grateful for anything to be on the table after a long day at work.