Reviews for Broken Hearted Fairytales
Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 5/15/2010
I think what I liked best about this piece was how nicely the stanza’s and descriptions flowed together. Your story was more symbolic as opposed to narrational, but I think in this case it really worked. The metaphors and internal dialogue were all very strong. I could really sense your narrator’s presence in this as well, which was really nice, the words definitely had a life to them.

The piece did seem a bit clichéd to me though. The idea of fairytales are so overused, I think, and although you had a few really nice niches, particularly: “I’m his never/never again” (which was very strong characterization, by the way, I could see this person without ever ‘seeing’ him in the descriptions) but still overall I felt like the idea has been used before, and I wanted more originality. I felt like you were really close to that, just not quite there yet. Keep up the good work.

Much love,