|Reviews for Ventures and Investments|
| aynaarah chapter 19 . 12/6/2014
Your talent is flourishing in this story as well.. clean-cut, organized.. no loose ends.. you skilfully weaved throughout the plot..
However, from time to time, the writing made me think of a slow-long tease due to unresolved sexual tension.. ..and maybe because I was imagining it will be a slave contract along the way.. (don't ask me why) ..but smooth, characters are consistent, are developing too.. .. good imo..
..some things, many things felt real.. I esp enjoyed the scene when Justin finds the notice on the office door from T. .. for me your story is worth reading only for that scene..(10x)
.. the psychological examples levelheaded/moderately sick?/.. we have a guy that cares to actually go for professional help "he has to fix things" ..here the reader feels he gets a serious opinion as well (10x).. &revelation ..oh! how small things can make you go blind a long way..
AND in the end, most importantly, the itchy need for the characters to speak and stand for themselves solves itself one way or another..
Thank you for your story!
| Clazziquai Project chapter 19 . 8/28/2014
YESSSSSSSS. Even though sometimes, Tony's behavior is inappropriate and questionable, I still was rooting for him the whole time! And Justin... He started out so unlikeable, I nearly quit the story, but I'm glad I stuck with it. What a journey it was!
| PET chapter 19 . 7/19/2014
It was exhausting to read, too.
When I got the alert of chapter 19, I didn't immediately read it. I mean, I JUST read it. It took me more than six months to make my wimpy self ready to read this last chapter. Well, I didn't know this would be the last. If I knew, I would immediately read it...because I was scared, my heart was too weak to find out whether or not Tony was genuine.
I'm glad I had decided to find out. I wouldn't know this would be the last otherwise.
About the ending, I was relieved, but not quite satisfied. Um...I want to see the reactions of Tony's employees about their relationship progress. Some PDA would be nice, haha.
Anyway, thank you for sharing this story. :)
| A Round of Artificiality chapter 15 . 6/29/2014
And Tony is completely unhinged. I think Justin's negative emotions towards him just keep feeding this darker side of Tony (which had taken over). It's really depressing to think he was so sweet before but, at the same time, I'm starting to doubt it was all there was about him. That part when the guy at the club (in the flashback) had been completely scared by whatever expression/look/glare Tony had on was pretty alarming, especially when Justin turned and he saw a different expression on Tony's face. Maybe he was always messed up and Justin brought out a different part of him. Or...he was normal and Justin brought out his worst in him (possessiveness, obsession).
That's some food for thought.
| A Round of Artificiality chapter 10 . 6/29/2014
I'm honestly surprised that Chris thinks that Tony isn't aware that he's (not was) in love with Justin. If you feel this strongly about someone, I'm sure you'd be able to at least acknowledge/recognize it. Why am behaving like this? That's what a person would ask himself. Hmm, I hope the continuation of the convo reveals more.
Another thing I'm surprised at is the idea that Justin knew. That totally negates a lot of the my opinions about him. I was thinking, he really must be thick or un-confident if he could recognize Tony's feelings towards him. I assumed he didn't know. But the fact that he was aware of Tony's feelings puts his betrayal in a whole different context. He knew the guy loved him and was sincere about him but he still screwed him over. I'm not sure much could redeem him now.
And Daddy Plank did give Tony the benefit of the doubt but whaddayaknow, Tony claimed to be the source of the leak to protect Justin. Man, the drama.
LOL. I'm enjoying this so far and I can't wait to be surprised even more.
| A Round of Artificiality chapter 9 . 6/29/2014
Hey I'm really loving this story because it's pretty fleshed out and I totally sympathize with both Tony and Justin.
What I really liked was how we gradually came to learn about the reason for Tony's deep hatred and nothing was ever spelled out until just a couple of chapters earlier. I picked up on this vibe from Tony that told me that he both loved and hated Justin and, man, that's a lot of intensity to take in. It was a little crazy to think of him hurting Justin to the point of tears and then, as though he can't help himself, gives him a hug or tries to make him feel better. I could feel the two combating emotions within Tony those instances.
The thing is, Justin does come across as a guy without pride or anything but my heart just goes out to him. I know what having low self-esteem means and how being around someone like Tony must have felt, so I can understand the way he acted (he had some serious Daddy issues as well). As if he wasn't lacking in confidence before, when his dad cut off his money, he lost all the "friends" he kept around. They were clearly around him because of his dad and never because of him. Perhaps no matter how sincere Tony treated him back then, Justin would have never saw it as it was.
Still, what Justin did was low (getting Tony fired and all shamefully) and I really don't want to get to that part of the flashbacks but I'm sensing it's coming soon. And, God-him whoring himself to anybody just shocked me. How desperate he must have been for his father's recognition to stoop so low...? It's also cruel, in a way. His father forced him into the whole talent agent thing when he never wanted any of it and then just told him to be the secretary of the guy his father treated like his real son. Ouch. That's just messed up.
I almost always leave long reviews but I could honestly write an essay on Tony and Justin's personalities. They're that real. So kudos for writing such three-dimensional characters.
However, I'm not really sensing any reciprocated feelings on Justin's part. Maybe it's because Justin's thoughts tend to center around his inferior complex but there should be at least something when we're half-way through the story. Justin's sort of 'ambiguity' when it comes to his feelings towards Tony only stand out more in comparison to Tony's intensity. So does Justin only feels envy and hatred towards the guy or what?
Another thing, the eye color keeps changing. This might seem like a tiny issue but it disrupts the flow of the story because I don't know how to imagine the two characters. Does Tony have icy blue, green, or blue-green eyes? Does Justin have green or brown eyes? You keep alternating colors so much I started making a tally XD So yeah, very distracting for an OCD person like me.
Okay, review over.
| No One chapter 19 . 6/28/2014
Hmmm. I'm unsure of how I feel about this.
I wish Tony and Justin had worked out the issues a bit more because honestly, that was a very abusive relationship and I never really got the feeling that Tony changed, which means I feel like he'll just go right back to abusing Justin if given the chance. I just feel like they still have a lot of issues they need to work out ...
Otherwise the story was great. Your writing and characters are fantastic (as usual), and I found myself caring for the side characters (even ones like Vincent who got little screen time). I wish Tony hadn't been so ... hate-able. I didn't feel any sympathy towards him, and I barely felt any towards Justin. In fact I sort of cared about the side characters more than these two ...
But it was a fun read, and maybe I'll purchase it from smashwords to see how it differs.
| Guest chapter 7 . 6/28/2014
I don't know if I want to finish this because honestly ... I'm rooting for Chris and I just know he's going to get the short end of the stick.
I hope he at least gets a happy ending.
| an chapter 19 . 6/5/2014
amazing story...I don't do reviews well but I'm trying to express my gratitude and appreciation for your story. It everything a reader needs and more when searching for romance and drama. the first chapter was very promising but then again I've stumbled upon stories that have a strong first few chapters and then let you down. I'm so glad you did not! The plot was very carefully thought after and the DRAMA...omg how can you go into your characters minds so deeply? I'm fascinated and have been reading this with butterflies in my stomach the entire time...Very nice ending as well (it was so fitting that Justin began to grow up, and move on with another job, not one he despised and not one that was a child's fantasy...very very fitting for the whole pieces of this story to fall into place).
Thank you once more for this story!
| Soraya Zeeva chapter 19 . 4/12/2014
Those two defiantly being together. Just like how Vincent and Chris should get together.
| 0111 chapter 19 . 4/9/2014
Loved the story! I've read it over and over and it never fails to entertain. Will you be writing a sequel, perhaps about Chris and Vincent? I feel like there's chemistry there in the scenes you wrote with them together. Good luck on our next ventures.
| rockspapersnscissors chapter 19 . 4/5/2014
I love the variety in your stories, but this wasn't my favorite one! :(
I don't think you cleared up the relations between the two effectively enough, and you gave Justin no aspirations, I think the photography bid was a good idea, but maybe I'm too idealistic for thinking that
Anyway, overall I'd give it a 8/10 Good plot, but confusing flashbacks, my biggest problem was with Justin's character, but that was just my preference! :)
| Guest chapter 16 . 3/28/2014
OH GOD! IM DYING BECAUSE RIGHT AT THE END OF THIS CHAPTER THERE'S THE ANNOYING POP-UP ADVERTISEMENT AND THIS ONE JUST SO HAPPENS TO SAY "CHOOSE YOUR BOSS" BWAHAHAHAHAHA IM ACTUALLY DYING. LIKE IF ONLY JUSTIN HAD SEEN THIS AD.
| hooked-on-you chapter 15 . 3/28/2014
omg. this is insane. and intense.
and i fucking love it.
| lalaland22 chapter 19 . 3/27/2014
I really enjoyed this story , it was very well written. When it comes to flashbacks, I find that a lot of writers don't know how to keep them as interesting as the present plot line and usually they end up seeming like a road block, but your flashbacks definitely helped progress the story in an interesting way. You took concepts that could've seemed contrived (love-hate, unrequited love) and made it original and intriguing.
If I had one qualm, I kind of would've liked to see how Justin, who's confidence was in ruins even managed to get to a place where he could truly accept Tony (emotionally) or even a bit more closure about how the two could move forward together after all that Tony has done. I only say Tony since Justin has not only apologized for his wrong doings, but he's kind of been paying for them throughout the whole story whereas Tony never really apologizes, and even at the beginning of this chapter, he still doesn't quite grasp how he literally kicked Justin while he was at his lowest, over and over again- with hardly no shame or consequence. At least when Justin betrayed Tony, it was obvious that it backfired on him in sooo many ways.
How can someone like Justin even truly trust Tony after everything. For instance, Tony always wanted Justin to pursue his dreams but how could Justin even believe him when he encourages him to go for his dreams or tells him that he's worthy when he's dedicated so much time into showing him just how useless he is? Maybe if we'd gotten just a tad bit more insight into how Justin began to rebuild his confidence, it'd seem a bit more realistic that the two could actually be healthy & happy together, b/c we'd see that Justin no longer needed anyone to validate his self-worth, Ultimately, it kind of just seems like Tony got his revenge( 10x over), and came out victorious all around, whereas Justin still has a troubling inferiority complex, and still never reached ( or it wasn't really hinted that he was even going to reach) the type of success that I'd imagine everyone was rooting for him to have.
Anyways, that's just my take on it...but overall I thought this was a very interesting story. Thank you for posting it. :)