|Reviews for Little One|
| Anna chapter 1 . 5/16/2010
Not be mean or anything..just some constructive criticism. BUT, the fact that you need a summary at the end of your story should be a sign to you that your writing needs some work. The grammar is fine, but I think you just need to work on your ideas and explaining things clearly so that your readers actually understand what is going on.
| ILveJcb chapter 1 . 5/16/2010
That's sad. Although i could guess that she was bringing in a child, what wasn't clear was how she had gotten raped-thefact that she had been raped in teh first place. However, the story seems really sweet. And i think that you could've made this a longer story, with proper converstions.
But i like it!