Reviews for Just Some Threesomes and Thresholds |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I think the story would be more enjoyable if you mixed up the paragraph structure a bit. Try not to always start with dialogue. i.e. Every once in a while, make it more like this: Sylvie mindlessly twirls a finger around Graham's curly locks. "You still bite your fingernails, and you still get pissed easily. So, there's no way you can be Mister Perfect and still have those⦠issues," she comments, only looking at him when she says the word "issues". Though it seems more like part of a longer story than a one-shot, I liked how the characters interacted. It's adorable how loved Sylvie is! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting beginning. I feel like Graham is iffy, but I'll have to wait :) |