uh oh. that doesnt sound like it bods well for jza.

Alsoi really hope u don't change lord t very much he seems like a very good charecter and I like the way your going with him

Hi I just wanted you to know I love your writing! Your writing flows and there's no awkward pauses in the middle... I started reading reading rejected with inevitably took me to your other stories but I think I like this one the best! Although I'm still hoping you update the other ones !

I really like your story so far! It seems like it has a lot of potential. I'm excited to see where it goes!

i would have reviewed before but my computer had a virus so i've been behind schedule in everything. really good chapter. jza's emotions are really brought to the forefront here, i feel, and it makes a connection between the reader and the character. hoping for more soon!

I'm really excited to see what happens now that Jza is forced under his care. Please update this soon! I love how this story isn't so fluffy.

I liked how you attribute her fruit knife antics with adrenalin. That thought of hers seems so realistic. Also how you described the sensation of his blood on her arm. Also I like your villians! Lord Tarquin is so cavalier: 'keep your bravado to yourself...I'm feeling generous today.'

Much impressed. Keep it up

I really enjoyed this chapter. I really like this story actually. Very different than your usual princess/prince story. As for the "doing part", I think they're necessary for the story. I really can't wait for the next chapter! Please update soon!

AH! why would you stop there? so suspenseful and exciting, i just want to keep plowing through it!

nothing to critique other then the cliffie, while murderous, is a good way to keep you readers coming back but don't over do it. sometimes it can work against you.

excuse me while i go re-read this a hundred more times

I definitely like the 'doing' stories. Never a boring moment. Good job. :) Again.

AHH!

This was exciting and engaging and fantastically creative all at the same time. I am burning to read more. Thanks so much for writing it, and please don't forget about it-update soon.

Only things I would crit are some grammar faults: 'beckoning', not 'betokening', 'obey' would probably work better than 'bide' by someone's wishes, and the 'enemy's soldiers' not 'soldier's'.

I really liked it. I like how unconventional she is and the fact that she's strong. What I really like is that you write Jza realistically. In the face of this giant obstacle, even though she is strong, it doesn't mean she cannot be afraid and have doubts.

I hope you keep going with this story!

Update BOTH stories please!

wow, thats so exciting! please write more, i want to know more!

i love the names of the characters. they're so exotic and pretty.

i liked the description you put in and the emotions yo dredge up. very powerful

can't wait to see more!