That was suspenseful and adorable all at once. :)

This was an amazing story i just loved it.

:o This is one of the best, if not THE best, original story I have read... EVER! Did you do research on supernaturals, or did you come up with the concept of the tulpas on your own? Anyway, this was a beautiful story; I found myself tearing up at the poignant, very appropriate, ending. Kudos to you!
-Grammar

Ah! This is the solution to the mystery!

It does kinda make a girl wish that EVERYONE could have their own tulpa-butr Peter's line about how difficult the Puritans were in comparison to the Algonquins was funny...

But the dramatic reveal, and the spectacular finish, was great, complete with the bittersweet ending.

This was a completely original story-in that it deftly combined elements of paranormal and romance -complete with some adorable children in the mix-that usually don't come together this smoothly. This reader is SO glad you posted it and gave me a chance to review!

Clio1792

Love the way this chapter began; Kat's nightmare (why does she imagine Lola? How does she know her name?) and then Cassy's nausea...

Poor Kat...her sleep-deprivation is coming across in her interaction with the children...but the kids sound great...Sean's knowledge and enthusiasm are well-drawn here, as is Kat's tension level...

Great confrontation with Peter: his role as the key to this is a great touch, although after spending a great deal of time with a man who didn't talk to her or tell her the truth, it's understandable that Kat would distrust him, and be frightened by her attraction to him...

The interaction with the children and the monsters,and then those final great scenes, with the burning of the sketchbook, and Peter and Kat's connection-are excellently done...

The premise of "Tulpas" is extremely interesting: I'm not sure I addressed this question to the author in correspondence, but is there any record of parallel legends in other cultures?

Lovely to have a man about the house-Peter is making himself useful, and the tension between him and Kat-and the mixed messages they send each other-feels like it's partially the result of Kat's understandable "gun-shyness."

But the Gorilla continues to lurk-Identifying it with BigFoot is interesting, but so is Peter's genuine response to the danger and subsequent back-pedaling...

Nice interspersing here of the Illusionist plot...

Clio1792

Surely the dream sequence here was one of the scarier passages this reader has read in a while...the author has marvelously captured the realistic quality of a nightmare...just superb; and Peter's sober comment on Kat's sad and devastated e-mails to her ex was sad and eerie in its insight as well...

Excellent chapter with nice, tense, unresolved ending,

Clio

Josh was such an excellent loser...stiffing Kat on the rent for months, going out and doing the college drunk thing, and then topping it all off by leaving just before New Year's. Kat's vulnerability and prickliness around Peter makes perfect sense under those circumstances...

good rapport with the children, in this story...nice tension with Peter...and then, there's the gorilla...

Solid chapter,

Clio1792

Familiar as this reader is with Morfiwien Greenleaf's fan fiction (which is recommended to all readers at this website), it is delightful to see her original fiction up as well, especially this excellent story!

Great beginning: we feel sympathy for poor Katrina, emotionally devestated, and financially impacted by her breakup with jerky Josh (funny how, even before a girl gets married, a breakup can have economic repercussions...this particularly rang true)...and compelled, by her situation, to take a babysitting assignment in a marginally dangerous situation: bad weather, and insufficient communication.

A nice, cliff-hanging exposition,

Clio1792

Short, sweet and a great read :)

The ending made me cry. I love this story and I was so surprised about Peter. Great Job!(:

Wonderful. I kept wanting to know what was going on and stuff! Then when it all came out I was like WTF? It was wonderful. I can't wait to read your other stories!

I really LOVED your story! I was really surprised he was a tulpa too! I liked the ending, although I'm not a fan of "not happyly ever after's"

You story is definitely and exception _n

Wow. I'm left speechless. I was just looking for a story to read and landed across this. Not only did I stay up till 3 to finish reading this, but I was so in awe and I normally don't review things, but I just had too! Your story, at first was a little confusing at parts and felt like things happened a little fast, but in the end you circled it up and made it all fit. So good! I love stories that circle around and your ending was amazing! Left something there... Great job!

geeze this story gave me nightmares. i should know better by now to not supernatural stuff before bed, but there you go.

this was an excellent story, i hope you give writing a sequal a go.

well done.