Reviews for lack
no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 5/23/2010
Nice. I like the first stanza the best - "telling the distance between our palms," and then, "all the stars I will eat/to get to you" are pretty great lines, and unique. I think the second stanza is probably the weakest in the poem; the use of "rudimentary" seems off here (it's too "big" of a word to fit the rest of the poem, if that makes sense) and I'm not sure I understand "runny rowboat." However, I do like the last two lines of that stanza. Nice work. Keep writing! :)