Cute and funny story. Thanks for sharing!

"If he wanted a whiny bitch, he'd just get a girlfriend." Well done. Your gay guys are men, not whiny little 'females' (my God, if I ever acted like the girls in 'romance' novels I'd willingly murder myself).

Short chapter and intensely unsatisfying (damn Colt, he kissed you, don't spurn him *facepalm*), which is sad times, because you haven't updated in a long time. *sigh* Well I just hope you're okay and still writing, even if you never do continue this.

Well... "beautiful little bitches", I guess I should say thank you? Haha, I've been called this before so it was a funny little 'dafuq' moment (I don't consider myself beautiful, but I AM a bitch).

I think you've got the perfect mix of hesitation and (for the sake of an M story) lust just right. Some people's writing deteriorates when they write almost-sex scenes, but yours doesn't, I congratulate you.

I also think you're writing's got better since you first started writing this, although that might be my imagination. *laughs*

-Desh

Oh some fun stuff. I like that Colt isn't the completely inexperienced dunce character, like so many of the 'adorable', 'clumsy', 'little' boys (okay the last part sounded wrong, but you know what I mean) in these types of stories.

Oh, and if you haven't realised by now, by writing all these reviews I'm trying to motivate you to write more of this story. Some people complete double-novel-length things with 20 reviews, I find it sad that this story is incomplete yet you have so many followers, favourites and reviews. Please update, don't leave us all with no real ending? :'(

-Desh

I like your females, I identify with them, *laughs* I eat faster than most of my guy-friends and I routinely eat a lot more than them (despite being too fucking skinny). I'm occasionally violent, definitely not a pushover and I hate soppy romance (love letters, flowers and the gushing of clingy guys)... Which means I usually don't rate the girls in books. I know Janet fell for Colt (even stalked him), but at least she isn't still puppy-eyed over him, or jealous, or... bitchy.

I rate your girls and I rate them high, they are realistic without being the usual stupid fluffs (I know there are a lot of them in real life too, but...).

Also... "sounds like the soundtrack to a gothic porno". Just what? Haha, I must get me some of that music.

-Desh

Last chapter I said I liked Connor better and it's true, but that doesn't mean I don't like Colt. You do the whole 'repeating time' thing well, it didn't take me long to get into the chapter after my initial heart-sinking moment. I like how it continued further as well, though I hope you don't always do the repetitive thing, I prefer it to be used sparsely.
-Desh

"Interpretive dance." Uh-huh. Colt, do you even realise how insane you are? I don't think you do.

I prefer Connor to Colt, though Colt's P.O.V. is pretty fun. I just like Connor whole reaction to everything, I mean if someone did that to me and they were okay looking I'd probably be like 'you're cool' whether they're female or male, but for a guy to react in such an easy-going way is nice and refreshing. (Most girls would freak out as well, wouldn't they?)

-Desh

I also don't like when people accidentally say things out loud... I have never seen - or heard - that happen, ever, so it's a pet-hate. Saying that I still liked the chapter, I still think you write quite well and you know your characters. You said you had trouble with this chapter? Perhaps it shows on a minute scale, but unless you are especially looking for it you wouldn't notice.
-Desh

I think Colt is slightly insane. In fact I'm sure he is. Oh well, it isn't like I particularly mind... I like writing (and reading) from a first person perspective for a reason: thoughts are such fun. I do dislike it when stories go back over the same time zone when changing P.O.V.'s, but this was bearable and informative.
-Desh

So far I really like this, it's well written, amusing and there isn't too much description. It's also nice that there isn't anything awkward about the situation, sometimes I try to read things only to give up because it ends up feeling like torture (or over-fluff, I hate over-fluff).
-Desh

I FREAKING LOVE THIS STORY! oh em gee! i think that colt is going to be my favorite! yes i do believe!

PO-TA-TO! *Irish accent*

you know who it is! :D

What a great story. You do such a good job keeping your characters personalities separate while also keeping a colorful narration. I'm sad there hasn't been a update in a while. Ah, well, things happen. But if you get a chance, maybe throw out a chapter or two for old times sake?

OMG! Please, please, please update soon!

Ohohoho~ I wonder what Colt's doing in the bathroom... w

OMG!

This is an absolutely amazing story, I'm so hooked on these characters and I cannot wait for chapter 10 ( . Yay!)

Just finished reading all the chapter and i can't wait for more i'll be waiting for the next one see you then.

~Turquoise~