YAY! you're back! :D

great chapter,FINALLY she realises that turner is an un-pleasant being!

I really liked this chapter, but of course I like all of the chapters. I also really like Jennifer, hope she sticks around. Here's a random question: Is it wierd that I picture all of the characters in the Kingdoms to be British? That just seems like it would make sense. :)

OH MAN. That was my reaction this chapter haha. I can't wait until we get to meet Jennifer. This is all very excited :D

EPIC! I love the style of this story. i haven't been keeping up very well i stoped reading for a bit but i'm glad i came back. so good. i wish lawson would come back he's still my favorite though i like phinn and turner to i even kidna like sage. i like them all! you make the characters so reall and fun and likeable

kthanks!

This is one of the most interesting things I have read on this site. I do hope you continue with it because the plot and characters are just so breathtaking to me. Currently Phinn is my favorite (and maybe Sage too :P). I have a soft spot for those types of characters.

Great chapter as always but, OH ELENA! So naive, I knew the moment Phinn said he was going to the dungeon she was gonna get stuck in there with him again. I love how absolutely crazy all of these people are. :)

AH! great! you had my hooked by the first chapter.

this was too awesome for words, i love the narrative, gives the story an upbeat vibe.

i feel really sorry Phinn, who im suprisingly starting to like.

my fav out of the brothers though is Lawson, he's really cute and i think he genuinely likes Elena, which makes me frustrated every time she runs away with turner!

hope to see a new chapter soon!

This story deserves way more reviews than what you have. Its fantastic. It has everything you would want in a good story. Action, suspense, and the possibility of romance. Not that you don't already know how good it is, you're a fantastic writer.

'In fact, she was really more the type of jovial and funny person.' somehow i thought this felt a little awkward, maybe 'In fact, she was really more like the jovial and funny type of person' would sound better?

'What sort of thing to say is that?' i get what you mean here, but it sounded a little... off to me. like maybe 'what a thing to say' would've been better, although i guess the impact wouldn't be as great.

i like your narrative voice in this story and oh man, i do hope elena regains her ability to express her creativity!

oo awesome! lawson was so cute in thsi chapter. "Lawson appeared to think that simply repeating Elena's question was a good enough answer."

haha. so was turner. a bit of a disfunctional family

Oh mann :D I'm so excited about what's going to happen next. So much intrigue!

sbsbsjsjsnehjjbjbjvc! This story is so good :D I love the plot and the mystery! What's real? Even I don't know haha. Excellent job!

really cute. i knew i liked turner best

i cant wait to see how different hail is from rain

this part:

Turner appeared thoughtful for a few moments, and then threw his arms in the air (figuratively, not literally) to show he didn't have a clue.

cracked me up. love turner. lawson's so cute all sleepy. great cliff hanger funny