|Reviews for She Said He Said|
| Srahil chapter 11 . 9/26/2012
As a response to both this chapter and your last message, which I found highly depressing/upsetting... I've decided to give you this public scorning:
I would say that we both probably write some crap with some good stuff thrown in, as most "beginners" do...
I'm a little hesitant to call myself a beginner now that I've been writing for like 10 years... And you may have been writing even longer than that... So maybe "young writers" or "aspiring writers" would be a better word choice...
But the point is that crap is a normal thing for people to write before they write really good stuff, and I've seen some really good stuff from you. SSHS was never the best in terms of originality or meaning/theme or even difficulty level... (Man, Strictly Bohemian, I remember that one being tough to read for some reason...) But I think despite being riddled with cliche and written from the POV of a teenager who actually sounds like a teenager, it's very entertaining. And in the end, that's what you're trying to do here, right? Entertain yourself while writing it, entertain others by sharing it... So, really it's not "crap" at all, because it isn't riddled with grammatical errors or horrifying spelling mistakes or characters who seem to be made of cardboard... It may have a few typos and spelling errors at the beginning, and some now because you rush and I get impatient, and hopefully the other people reading it get impatient too so I'm not the only jerk demanding that you write more RIGHT NOW... But when all is said and done, SSHS has achieved its purpose, and you should be a little more proud of this and all of your other stuff.
Every story you ever write (EVER) will have flaws. Things you wrote a long time ago, like the beginning of this story (and yes, I will continue to re-read it every time I forget how it begins and you update it, but no that isn't a hint, you're doing fine with the updating) will have lots of flaws that are easily visible to you because you've been able to distance yourself from it. That does not now, nor ever, make your writing crap. YOU ARE A BEAUTIFUL SPECIAL SNOWFLAKE AMONG ALL THE OTHER NON-BEAUTIFUL, NON-SPECIAL SNOWFLAKES, and I love this story... All 26,761 words of it... BEGINNING to end. Yes, even the beginning, Erika. The beginning is what made me inexplicably love this story even when I can't remember what it's about. I read the beginning because I actually like it. I love all of it.
...Except the two mean words that the straight popular boy called his fake gay boyfriend when finding out that he was really gay... Those were mean, and Kenzie made a mistake. He apologized though. He didn't mean it, I'm sure. I still really like Kenzie. Jonah is okay, but... But Kenzie was introduced first, so he's more important and obviously the main love interest (Don't go plot twisty on me now, Erika, don't.) and Jonah must have some flaw... Maybe it's just that he's not Kenzie.
I'm just happy that they're fake dating again now... So they can get on to the real dating part soon... Right? I get that you probably want to torture us and take a long time making them fall in love and you have to deal with other stuff too like Raze and Randy and Jonah... But I have some faith that Calvin and Kenzie will eventually be together, like... for real. (None of that plot twisty playing with cliches and then laughing maniacally as we suffer, got it? Unless you must... But I might ACTUALLY CRY. REAL TEARS. sopleasedon't)
I love you. This has gotten way longer than I thought it would be... I'm actually hoping it lets me post it, or I'll have to send it to you in a message... Which would be fine... But, I'd rather leave it as a review.
| Guest chapter 11 . 9/26/2012
wohoo whos that randy
| xSuperiorex chapter 11 . 9/25/2012
I don't have enough time to really go in detail but I really like this story. The characters are fab (I just used that in a sentence) and it's realistic. Also, the chapter length is nice.
| Explicitly Simple chapter 10 . 8/23/2012
This is hilarious! I love it! Can't wait for the next chapter!
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/16/2012
woah, next please…
| Kira Redbane chapter 10 . 7/16/2012
I absolutely love this story. You have such a talent with words, I am completely jealous. I adore the characters and the personalities and I do not know who I like the most. Please, continue in weaving your amazing tale.
| Srahil chapter 10 . 7/16/2012
Yay! An update! So happy! But also sad...
That's right Kenzie is an idiot! But he's a good idiot(I'm sure, he doesn't seem good now... but he is, because that's how fiction works...) so they will make up and be idiots together.
"I push my glasses father up my nose..."
I don't remember whether or not I liked Fame before. I probably didn't, because she's a girl and all. But her logic about soggy people has totally made me like her. Enough to even remember her name now.
"Now winning against the weather..."
Enter: New Character who has yet to be judged... I'll form an opinion of him later. It probably won't be that great... Even though like, he seems nice and all... And... I do kind of like him... and yeah... He's nice so far.
"The things I keep thinking about my new friends!" This. This type of thing is why I love this story.
And the description of theatre kids. Everything I loved about senior year summed up into a sentence or two about cafeteria behavior.!
"I pluck the straighter..."
I have a plan, a plan I think Calvin would agree with wholly. Since he doesn't exist, you can help...
...In the dead of night... you and I grab some provisions...
..I should stop now. It's really troubling that I cannot use the word 'Plan' without that quote...
The point I'm trying to get to is that there should be no more facebook. Facebook should burn and die and be tortured for years... We'll have to figure out how to personify a website first. (Not the creators... the actual website.)
Calvin is so amazing. You're going to update this again soon and not take forever, right? :)
| Enemy of Righteousness chapter 9 . 8/19/2011
Oh my god it took me forever to log in. Damn you Captcha, you win again.
Anyways...I need moar of this, to feed the hunger. It's the hunger that lurks within and you need to feed it with the wonderful words you weave like fine silk. It you don't I will transform into a hideous beast that feeds off that blood of virgins, and it will be all your fault. People will say; "Gosh Ri Kylee what's wrong with you? All those people are dead and it's your fault!" and others will say; "WHY RI KYLEE? WHY? I LOVED HER!" and I don't think you want to deal with that.
That was not a threat.
Um, but seriously, this story is pretty cool. I give it one fig newton out of one hundred. Because I hate fig newtons. They are disgusting, who would eat such a thing? Back to being serious, this story pwns and is super 1337 h4x0r. Iunno, I just like the plot, the way you write it (Like weaving fine silk) , and the characters. Especially Raze, yes...I hope that doesn't make me sick. I can't wait to see what that little fuck does in the future. Calvin is cool too, does he play Magic the Gathering? He sounds like he would play Magic the Gathering..or maybe Starcraft. No wait that doesn't matter. Uh, Kenzie's an awesome character as well but he likes to piss me off or something, the little wank stain.
I think I'll stop typing now.
| Srahil chapter 9 . 7/13/2011
It's about time, right?
Anyway, for the first half of this chapter, I kept thinking "What the heck is Kenzie doing?"
At the end, though, the question was still unanswered. Actually, by the end, I had more questions... like "Why is Kenzie so mean?" and "Why would Calvin bring something like that up? o-o"
Telling Kenzie he is gay is one thing, but getting confused after only one pretend date... This boy doesn't act as smart as his nerdiness says he should be...
Anyways, for the most part, the chapter was cute as always...
When I mentioned about the mean word, I wasn't suggesting that you change it... with the tone Kenzie seems to have, he could be calling Calvin a "ground-walker" and still seem like a jerk...
| TheWorldOfLove chapter 9 . 7/9/2011
well...that went well. I'd like to see what happens next!
| TheWorldOfLove chapter 8 . 7/9/2011
Love how they're a 'fake' couple. Doesn't even seem fake..
| TheWorldOfLove chapter 2 . 7/8/2011
Ouch. Calvin takes alot of bull. I think he needs to borrow some of my dads machine guns. lol. Moving onto next chapter
| TheWorldOfLove chapter 1 . 7/8/2011
Awesome writing. This is so going to my favorites! And so are you.
| Renate chapter 8 . 4/29/2011
Hey, hope you haven't abandoned this story. I really like it, and I wanna know what happens, please.
| violet-chi chapter 8 . 12/19/2010
Oh, the intrigue! xDD Better write fast, or I'll die with suspense! And then come back as a ghost to read the next chapter.