Reviews for Blue Sky
janetisawesome chapter 1 . 6/3/2010
its good, but you are missing punctuation so its hard to read.
Charissa Mariah chapter 1 . 5/25/2010
Ok so i liked the idea for this story, but the run-on sentences and the grammatical/spelling mistakes made it hard for me to read. I really liked your use of description though. Very good. I have recently published a piece called prayer and would love if you could review it for me! It is only the first of many chapters to come, but I would love the feedback and I hope you keep writing more. My suggestion is give it to someone else to read and see what they have to say :) Thanks!
moongazer7 chapter 1 . 5/24/2010
Please add more details to your story. show us the story don't tell us. Allow us to imagine the scenes clearly and feel the sensations your character does. Show us the forest and the hourse. Make a picture with words.