Reviews for Shatter
brit02 chapter 65 . 7/21/2011
So, Marcel is possessed by Lucifer? :O
brit02 chapter 64 . 3/25/2011
I think that Ebony gets pissed at Dem for the oddest reasons, but the make-up after is always very sweet :)
Bridgett-blah chapter 64 . 3/24/2011
Aw . They are just the cutest! Hehe. Now all they have to do is wait...and wait and wait and wait. That'll be fun!
brit02 chapter 63 . 3/15/2011
This was really interesting, if a bit...confusing at times. When you don't make it clear who is talking and such, I (personally) get really confused with what is going on. Jussayin. (Though I think I've mentioned this before.)
Bridgett-blah chapter 63 . 3/12/2011
Oh my. Why doest he remember? Ebony cant be mad at him! I hope not . YAY, I missed you D Update son yea!
Anti-Banana19 chapter 2 . 2/25/2011
Cool...

Really caught my attention.

Awesome story!
brit02 chapter 62 . 2/24/2011
This is great! It filled in some holes without disrupting the plot, and I think it came at a fantastic time :)
Bridgett-blah chapter 61 . 2/2/2011
Oh my, Dyem is just the best for her.
brit02 chapter 61 . 2/2/2011
I like what you did in the last chapter, it made it flow better and worked really well :)

This chapter was sweet until the end- gosh, Lily is such a bee-atch! I've created a monster! Lol. I like how you said 'venomous green eyes' coz I don't usually think of green as venomous, but dark, soothing and mysterious x) nicely done!
brit02 chapter 60 . 1/25/2011
ok, I'm glad Dem didn't screw this up as he normally would :) however, when she got the necklace, you should have had a bunch of little flashbacks and stuff, so that we know for sure that she just received her memories xD
Bridgett-blah chapter 60 . 1/22/2011
Oh my. She remebers now xD
brit02 chapter 59 . 1/19/2011
A memory I assume? Nice. I enjoyed it... a lot. xD
Bridgett-blah chapter 59 . 1/15/2011
Oh my. Flashback! I love Dyem...Haha. Cain and Abel? Ha, is the gang some sort of christian group or something xD I want more!
Bridgett-blah chapter 58 . 12/5/2010
Wait...Who exactly is Warren again? RAWR, I cant remember... Oh well, I guess I need a bit of a refresher on the Characters... Anyways, I hope to see more of Beryl! I'm probably not the one you should ask about mistakes or anything, cause when I read, I read stuff I'm I'm not, and when I'm into it, I don't give a damn about mistakes. Now, If its bad, I'll say something but I normally ignore mistakes...Its bad...I know.
brit02 chapter 58 . 12/5/2010
Ok, I think you have too many characters in such a 'small' fic. It's very hard to keep track of all the good guys. There are too many, and not enough time for you to develop each one. You keep trying to develop each character-which I admire you for-but it's too big a project. There are too many people, too many backstories, and not enough time. You could have a separate fic where you have a chapter for each character, describe their story and refer to it each time you mention them to make the story flow and for the plot to progress. If you keep trying to develop the characters like this your readers would soon begin to lose interest in your story because it's losing plot. One thing you always have to ask yourself before writing a chapter-does this chapter affect the plot and/or story in anyway, or may I go without it? Each chapter, each reference and each character must have an ultimate purpose in your fic.

Sorry to be so critical, but you asked for it!
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