Awe. so cute ending.

i loved Samson and Loretta and Her Aunt.

the bit about the dog and the food had me in stitches at the start, which followed on in a tension fill romantic drama. it was an excellent story. i loved reading it. it's been a pleasure (i am even favouriting ;p) thank you for sharing, your a beautiful writer!

interesting chapter. i wonder if her mum will tell her.

oh the tension is mounting. good chapter

Sam is right no mocking the bug. i love bugs, i always wanted one but i never got one.

i am loving this it captivating. can't wait to know whats going on ;p

I love her aunt. she is so cool ;p

G'day.

Ok first thing I want to say is this first chapter is awesome. I loved the you described her aunt and even then small details like the state of her house and sam's car. there was something very real about it. i grow up right on the beach and this like sand being everywhere, the smell, the constantly dirty windows (windex doesn't help by the way) is excatly what it's like. i love how you have captured the whole feel.

Now for the advice, change your summary. i almost didn't read it because your summary was boring and not noticeable. sadly the 'what is a girl to do' get more attention.

for yours even changing it to something simple (and because i don't know where this is going yet) do something like

- Her Aunt Themla told her that her eighteenth summer was the best summer of her was a certain innocence to it. Liz wasn't sure she could call her own innocence but there was certainly something about it. It, being the boy she never saw coming. -

Asumping there is a guy here. but something like that will get loads more readers in. i personally love it so far.

LOVE IT! This is so so so good:). Keep on writing!

Great story!

One thing that I found confusing was "Check. Mate." (as well as the paragraph before.) I don't exactly see how the "Check. Mate." fits in with everything else-or even relates to the preceding paragraph, but perhaps that's just me:)

Amazing!

ohmygoddess. This is amazing..

Wow. More? Please?

Good job. Very detailed and I liked the dialogue. It sure is alot harder to get reviews on here than it is on fanfiction! I'm sure this would be popular on there :)