Super "Aw" should go here! This is really cute :D :D I love it :)

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I would love to see that girl swim quickly in a pink bathing suit without exposing her tits to the world. It would be a magical feat. Also, I think a 23 second 50 free is nearly Olympics ready time. They would have been calling newspapers and ... throwing up with excitement. Other than that, the story was good. Short and simple, with minimal adult interaction, coupledom achieved sans any real conversations (Okay, that was something I just realized) and a helpful sidekick best friend. Thank you for writing it.
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that was terrific, but it's kinda weird 4 teens 2 do that...

LOL, so cheesy :D but cute :)

ohmegod!

ive been looking for this since last year because i didnt finish reading it

you can not imagine my happiness when i realized that you were the author

its like that moment of happiness when you see the waiter coming with your food at a restaurant:D

well,

until next time...

*thumbs up*

Hey I loved it :) And I am a swimmer, so I kinda have to critique that there are WAY more than 15 teams at state...like, a lot more. And girls don't go to swim practice in bikini's... it would fall off as soon as you jumped in the pool. They do make kinda skanky practice suits that are still two pieces (They have these tie things so they don't fall off) if you want something like that. Same with the guy's a trunks. He would be wearing jammers... anyway the actual story was really good :D Keep writing!

Ha..ha... that was really funny. I had to laugh at Dario in the background when they are in the room.

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Hi. It is so beautiful story and I love it. :) I am wonder how old are Dario, Malcolm and Ashton? *curiously* I am so glad that Malcolm and Ashton are on same team. :D I am glad that Malcolm loves to swim since he was a boy and follow his oldest brother's footstep to be involve in swimming team for competition. Yay. :D It'll be great if Malcolm want to be famous swimming in the future. *hopeful smile* It is shame that Malcolm's young brother hate swim because swim is good exercise for everyone. It can be hobby or competition. :) I am so glad that Malcolm and Ashton became friends then item. Yay. :D I am wonder how long does Malcolm and Dario were best friends for? *curiously* I can't swim either and I want to learn how to swim, surf and dive etc in the future. :D I am wonder if there will be one shot stories of Ashton and Malcolm? *curiously* I am wonder if you are plan to write Dario's story in the future? *curiously* It is amazing story and I am enjoy read this story. I love it. Keep writing. Don't stop writing. :D

so it tickled me pink that it was about swimmers:) haha, cuz i swim competitively.

anything i would have suggested, someones already pointed out, like the meter thing( high school would be swimming in yards) and probably not swimming as fast as the times.

still it was a cute one-shot, kudos!

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hey this was immensely cute and i enjoyed it very much! i had no idea you knew nothing about swimming ! but then again, i'm a non-swimmer too soo yeah. i can't believe you made something as strange as running through hotel hallways instead of using a towel sound almost... normal.. good job! :)

Nice...

Poor Dario

Awesome story, I'd really like to see somebody do two laps in 20-something seconds...is that even possible for a teenager to do? Wow.

I am a swimmer, so that did help me. :D

Really good one-shot, and I'm loving the friendly competition between Ashton and Malcolm.

And oh, I like running down hotel hallways too, but not when I'm wet and freezing cold.

I digress. Ultimately, a really memorable, cute story. Well done.

Haha.

I LOVE DARIO!

I love the character...I don't know your best-est friend.

Funay story and very cute.

I totally read this.. and I don't have it reviewed. Bad me.

I thought this was super cute. And oddly enough, for me, I kinda like kids like this haha.

Love the story!

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