I loved this entire story so much. I really love Domanic, he's so sweet but I really want to know what happened to Kaily, as much detail as possible. I'd love for the chapters to be longer too but apart from that I LOVE THIS STORY!

More more please.

aww that's so sweet! Dominic is such a sweet talker! man is he smooth! if only the boy was real C: ""I've made my decision Miss Ascarela. It will be based on your response. I will stay for the summer, but only if you promise I get to spend a majority of it with you." I love that! can't wait to read more!

oww i like Dominic. he's very smart. that was cunning how he out smarted Kyle. I dont like Kyle, he's not that great and he has no spark to him.

This chapter was written much better... You described the fear she felt well.

With the two perspectives in the one chapter thing... I am rather neutral either way. You could do it this with longer chapters, or just have two shorter ones. Doesn't bother me. I say do it how you want, it is your story.

Keep up the good work

Daerana

ahh! scary dream D:

Hahaha, i like it this way too :]

I love this story so bad and I love how you do two stories in one. MORE PLEASE!

alright I really like this story. Dom is so sweet :) ok so Kailey is the little girl he found at the police station files right? What happens when she finds out he knows and he finds out its her? Ahh going crazy over here tehe :) Update soon!

Byee

good story, keep going and all that :)

Just be careful though when you are writing that you go into enough detail about the descriptions. For example, the description of the apartment was only about two sentences. I know you must have an image in you mind of how it looks and I unserstand that it is not always easy to be able put that imagedown in writing. A useful tactic that I often use is to see the scene in you mind and then when it is clear, think, or say out loud what you see. Close your eyes if it helps. But when you do try and describe it as if you are talking to someone who is blind. Then, write it.

Hopefully some of my advice helps you. I like it when others suggest things to improve to me as it allows me to develop and improve as a writer, but if you'd rather I didn't make such suggestions let me know and I wont. I know it offends some people.

Anyway, keep up the good work. I'm looking foward to reading more of your work.

i actually liked how you combined the stories.:)

Nice work, I am still loving this story. :)

Although I am happy that they are together again, just be careful that you don't rush your writing and description of events too fast.

Just a though I had... I am curious now about knowing some more about Dominic... I was just thinking taht you have not revealed a great deal about him... even just family, friends, his time at college, childhood, etc...

Awesome story though, keep it up. I'm looking foward to seeing how they go now.

aww, really cute chapter:)

aw they couldn't say goodbye to each other...

ahaha hope they both have unlim. talk or else the bill will be hectic (lmao)

It's kinda bittersweet, because They're back together:) but then he has to leave:(

aw

anndd aw hes still leaving... :(

ahaha

aw he's gonna leave... :(

whoa, i would've felt shocked too