|Reviews for an open book|
| Chocolate Herrings chapter 1 . 6/16/2010
I LOVE that last line. 'I hate how easily you've learned to unlace the taut binding of my spine, sneaking looks at the pages of myself I never meant for anyone to see.'
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 6/13/2010
This feels very . . . formal(?) to me, like the wording is too "perfect" for such a personal moment. If that makes sense. It gets better at the end, where "I hate how easily you've learned" starts, though. Interesting, in any case. Keep writing! :)
| wo bu ai ni le chapter 1 . 6/13/2010
I like the word choice here, some somewhat disturbing and really expressing the vulnerability, like 'scabs' and 'unlace... my spine'. The word 'taut' gets across the endeavour to hold on and shut yourself in.
I think I know how this feels. It feels half comforting and half insecure to be seen through.