|Reviews for The Power of Destiny|
| Guest chapter 25 . 9/16
I liked the story until the rape. This is promoting rape as it puts it into a light as if it is okay if there is a reason behind it. Also it seems every criminal in your story first thinks of raping. The characters do not show many different layers. Also some happenings are rashed like you just need to get the story going.
There are many opportunities to give your story more depth and giving it time to develop.
For example the mating. It's just there.
Also what about the little girl who's mother got killed?
What about Sebastian?
What about the ferry queen or the Dragon ruler?
You have many storylines ending in nothing while the main story is one act following the other without an increase in drama. Give the reader time to really understand what consequences there are before you through the results at him. You have very good ideas. I don't mean to criticize only, but I would like to tell you what came to my mind reading this.
| bubublacz chapter 12 . 1/10/2014
Ugghhh don't like tamara ugghh..
| bubublacz chapter 1 . 1/10/2014
Oh man oh man oh man! I'm liking this *chesire grin*
| nrlyne13 chapter 18 . 1/2/2014
Is Mateos mate Britney?
| nrlyne13 chapter 9 . 1/1/2014
YES! Please do a Kato/ Tamara POV. Perhaps a short Mateo/ his mate...
| Prodigee123 chapter 12 . 10/23/2013
I absolutely hate tamara
| Prodigee123 chapter 10 . 10/22/2013
| Prodigee123 chapter 9 . 10/22/2013
dont really care for tamara
| AdooreKhwab chapter 23 . 8/8/2013
Yayyy! It finally over! So glad that everything pieced together just fine. You did a good job. In the last few chapters, you displayed the tendacy of using "you're" instead of "your". Please fix that and the other mistakes when you have time :) I think your story is quite publisher-worthy. You never told us what happened to Sebastian? Remember how he was talking weirdly to Shayla? I thought you were going to follow-up on that. What happened? And how can Mateo just call off the bethrotal like that? I felt that was anti-climatic. I was expecting more of dealing with the technicalities of what the Fairy Queen had declared. What happened to Madeleine?
| ChrnoDude chapter 3 . 6/24/2013
Hmm, I have never read a dragon story, usually all I find is wolves. This seems pretty promising though.
| Alaeryel chapter 9 . 12/30/2012
LOVED THE CHAPTER and I would MOST DEFINITELY READ the other story in the other two's perspective-I just CANNOT SEEM TO GET ENOUGH OF YOUR WRITING AND YOUR STORIES-THEY DEEPLY TOUCH MY HEART!
| Alaeryel chapter 8 . 12/30/2012
OH BLOODY HELL-AMAZING CHAPTER and EXCEPTIONAL WRITING!
| Alaeryel chapter 7 . 12/30/2012
I have LOVED all the chapters myself Des and think you are doing a GREAT JOB! I LOVE how Lucian's dragon keeps saying 'MINE'-it makes me SMILE!
| bettyboop1124 chapter 13 . 12/30/2012
Oh no! They can't die!
| Alaeryel chapter 6 . 12/30/2012
YOU ARE EXCEPTIONAL at telling a story and the writing is AMAZING! I cannot get enough!