Reviews for Song
JaffaFoose chapter 1 . 6/16/2010
Eh... it's a nice little piece that expresses some very lovely sentiments, but I think it could have been done better. Just feels like you rely a bit too much on repitition. Twelve lines: 'My song' appears in three of them, 'I smile' appears in two, 'you're singing to me' in two... it was basically like the first and last stanzas expressed the same basic thing, and the second stanza expanded on it a little bit. In essence the first and last stanzas said 'you wrote this song for me,' and the middle stanza said 'and now you're playing it at a concert.'

Sorry if this sounds harsh, because it WAS an enjoyable read... it just seemed lacking in depth.