Reviews for The Falls |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting enough start. There were a few times when you forgot to put a period or comma at the end of a quote-"Blah blah blah"-and at the end 'sister's' should be 'sisters' but otherwise, it was neat. I hope it doesn't revolve around vampires, though. -Narrows eyes suspiciously- But, yeah. I guess I might keep reading? |
![]() ![]() ![]() keep up the amazing job, and update soon :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This story is very good so far :) so please update soon, so I could read more of it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was exactly what I was thinking! When you look at the chapter as a whole, you see lots of "Camerons" as if he was the center of her mind- Even though he was with Elizabeth, that might change. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I enjoyed it a lot! It seems to me that the boy is the one who fixed up the old tree house because 88 years? It would be unstable. Very mysterious kid, I wonder why he isn't with parents or anything. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Creepy, it catches the readers attention and makes them want to read more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() preface: Oh, this reminds of 'The Village'. I am kinda intrigued. ch 1: I'm really hoping this boy in the woods isn't a vampire or a werewolf. ch 2: Does the town's name have anything to do with the plot? And work on your puncuation. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved the way you presented the legend. And werewolves! This is a very exciting prospect... Update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved this story! I can't wait for you to add another chapter, really. The narrative is so strong that I am intrigued by Nate, I fear for Elizabeth and I cannot wait to discover the true nature of these so-called 'creatures!' This is one of my favourite novels (I'm assuming that's what it is to become?) on FictionPress and I've R&R a few. The best part, for me, was the simple opening of the first two chapters. This consistency, at first, made me wonder if there was to be some sort of time loop created by Ann's mysterious woodland surroundings but it all became clear as I read on. I really enjoyed reading it, I think 'The Falls' is great. If you'd like me to review anything else- just send me a message! LMSmythe. ANY REVIEWS I RECIEVE WILL ALWAYS BE RETURNED. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is getting really really mysterious! Elizabeth missing! And Nate...is he the boy from the woods? I'm looking forward to discovering more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I can't believe I didn't read this before! Your writing is very captivating. When Annabel first ran into the woods I kept finding myself reading faster, worried about what was going to happen. The detail about how the trees didn't die in Everlast Woods was a nice touch -creepy too. So how often are you updating? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting! You've set Everlast Falls up as a rather creepy and mysterious place. The line about the woods surrounding the entire town particularly caught my imagination. It makes it sound as if the town is trapped by the woods. |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's an interesting beginning; the foreshadowing with the dog is nice, but the scene with the pool is a bit confusing. Is it a swimming hole, or is it literaly a cement pool? It's never really described. I'm fascinated with the club house and how the carving has stayed for eighty-eight years, and of course, the boy is extremely intriguing! Good job! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh snap. MYSTERIOUS BOY. That's always fun. Again I like the way you write. Look forward to more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really like your writer's voice in this opening. I shall continue reading to see what other awesome writing you have in store. I'm very curious about these creatures. :D |