|Reviews for Indians and Cowboys|
| Salinas chapter 1 . 6/18/2010
This is a good start to an interesting concept. I really like the idea of the story, and its something I haven't seen done much before. Aside from a few spelling and grammatical errors your diction is good.
I would really like to see more description of the setting. What is Jack feeling? He's in a new country, all alone - wouldn't he be scared? Why or why not? It's those kinds of things that your first chapter is lacking. But if you elaborate on them in later chapters, develop Jack's character and the setting, I think you'll have one heck of a story. :)