I find your idea quirky and original, with the knights all being women in such a country and the whole society being female dominate instead of male dominate. However, I really don't like the prince, he just rubs me wrong way. Not the the way that means he is evil/creepy, but in the way that he should have been better educated. Particularly in this chapter when he could have told the princess that perhaps she would "feel differently if she spent some time amoung the female knights" of his kingdom.

The first chapter did leave me with a few odd questions, such as "Where are all the men?" and "Who has time for children?" but I guess these questions aren't really that important to the plot.

The plot, whatever it is, hopefully involves tons of action on the fem!Knights part, and hopefully some on the princes. If you do hand the prince of sword, please don't make him learn itt too quickly, as that would defy too much logic for one story.

Anyways, I hope this quirky adventure of yours continues.

I liked it! It was an interesting concept to say the least! A few things I noticed: The climax fell a bit short. I was expecting more, but it seemed to just end without any sort of struggle or dramatic action. Also: You use a lot of cliché language. For example, you say simply, "I blacked out." You should use more original description so it feels like the reader is in the story! Use this to help you: If you've read it somewhere else, don't use it - make up your own images! Finally: It doesn’t seem like the kidnapper has a solid excuse for taking the prince. You should develop his motives more! Other than that, I really liked it! Please write more stories! I'll be waiting! Hugs and kisses!

Finally a story that actually puts females in a good light! I liked the story and I have to always laugh when I listen to his speeches. I don't think they were meant for kidnapping situations.

Anyway, I enjoyed this chapter and I hope you continue it.

Loved it!

Lynx

I enjoyed reading your story very much. I like the concept of the female and male roles switched, and I'm excited to see more female knights more than anything. I hope Damian is developed into a cool character and not a typical copy/paste sort of politician :)

Looking forward to more,

- Zeffy

If you could take a look at my stories, namely The Red Sun of Valaren, it would be greatly appreciated!