I hope there is a story about Demetri and his mystery woman...

Chapter Title...Jealous Raevid and Kissing a Drothon...

That was a good story...

Amazing story! One of the best on this site. I have one complaint though, as most people do, I feel like there are parts missing between chapters?

It's really well written although I did find some spelling mistakes throughout this work as a whole. I really enjoyed reading this

I loved the story but it seemed at times to skip. Almost like chapters were missing. Great Plot!

.goodness. That. Was. AWESOME! I was taken on a dark journey. Although, I was swearing and cursing and cursing Giselle when it came to the drothen guide. I'm so happy that she didn't die. It was just awesome, it was so strong and it was amazing. I just. I loved it

this was extremely well written. I loved every moment of it.
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Wow that was amazing. The storyline and detail was perfect to where I was always interested. The creative ideas were so great, I found myself in awe at times. This needs to be published. The only thing I found odd were the few times the story seemed to jump, like 54-55 and when raevid got allergies. It was a little confusing. Other than that I really enjoyed this read! Great work.

"I wanted to see that you are still here." He stepped back and Giselle looked at him quizzically. "Also, I wanted to warn you about the noise you made earlier. We could be found if we don't stay silent."

"That's why I was going to look for you." Raevid looked down at her, one white-silver eyebrow rising. "I wondered if you might teach me your hand language."

"Why would I do that?"

"So that I will know to be silent next time. I need to be ready to follow orders as well." The second eyebrow went up and Raevid locked his hands behind his back.

"Good argument," he admitted. "Come." He walked to the middle of the largest room and sat on the floor. Giselle sat across from him. He held his right hand up against the right side of his chest and put his fingers in a certain position. "It is complex, human. Hopefully, you can understand it."

"I am willing to try." Raevid's brows now came down in a frown and he closed his fingers before taking up the position again.

"Let's start with the basics. This means silent." Giselle nodded slowly, making the same symbol with her fingers. Raevid leaned in, pushing her hand closer to her breast. "You must hold it there. Any further away or to either side and you will say something different." Giselle nodded and repeated the gesture just as he wanted. Raevid nodded approvingly. They did this for what seemed like a long time and Raevid finally signaled that she should go to sleep. She replied with an agreement and stood up, walking to her bedroom and collapsing on her cot.

Very well written story I was enjoying it but its hard to figure out what's what because its all out of order it seems like it jumps backwards and forwards

Hey I know people have been saying that the Drow weren't your own idea and that you took the idea from D&D. I'm just letting you know that D&D took the idea of the Drow and the underdark from Irish folklore... so I don't see why you shouldn't be able to use them. Great story by the way.

loved this.. but it was a bit hard to follow because you skipped ahead from time to time. My only suggestion would be to fill in the gaps or transition smoother somehow?

THIS WAS AN AMAZING STORY. ONE I READ IN ONE FULL DAY! I AM HUMBLED BY THE POWER IN IT AND THE WAY I WAS PULLED INTO CARING FOR THESE CHARACTERS. I TRULY ENJOYED THE TRIP THIS STORY TOOK ME ON AND WAS VERY PLEASED WITH THE ENDING! THANK YOU FOR YOUR IMAGINATION AND THE GIFT THAT YOU HAVE IN WRITING THIS PIECE! I TRULY LOVED IT!

Ermmm... So I'm confused. Giselle died? How did she die? The last thing I knew Twitch had disemboweled his ex, and Banth had pushed Giselle behind him to protect her... I think there are a few chapters missing here or there... It really seems like some things referred to later on never happened.
But even with those confusions, this is an amazing book! I love Giselle, although I do think Raevid is a little too bipolar for my tastes hahahah.
And Banth is an adorable little future-sex-god.
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